TPO 18-2
It goes without saying that in such a sophisticated world where people are putting all their efforts to havea better life, having relationship and share interests with other would be a rational task. No one can deny the effects of communication on people’s lives. One of the most contentious issues having been brought up recently is whether students are more influenced by their friends or teachers. Some people hold the view that teachers play the most practical role in children’s life. However, the majority of people contradict this idea and look at this concept through a different lens. As a matter of fact, I subscribe to the view of those people and I contend that friends are more likely to influence on children. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into some conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my perspective.
The first exquisite reason to be mentioned is that children spend most of their times together at school and they always spend more time even after school hours. No one can cast that shadow on the fact that they easily get accustomed to each other and they also imitate what their friends do. An example can illustrate this idea. Take for example my younger brother; He always mimics the behavior of his friend John, in such a way that is really embarrassing. A noteworthy refreshingly intelligent statistic revealed by some social researchers conducted in my country, indicates that time spending is a key factor to get effect for any phenomena including friendship. If children spend much of their time together, their manners and behaviors will be as similar as their friend. Whereas they spend just a few hours with their teachers.
Another subtle point which deserves some words here is that the same age, the same taste. To illustrate, children have much in common than with their teachers. Taking into account the fact that difference between ages is a considerable factor to get influenced by others. There has been a great deal of research into the potential benefits of friendship showing that children are reluctant to convey with their teachers and they prefer to be with those that have some in common. Some scholars from all over the world argued the effect of age difference on the student’s behavior. So they organized an experiment program. The results were surprising: over 90 percent of students were more inclined to have relationship with the children in the same age due to the fact that they have a lot of interests and desires in common.
To put it briefly, contemplating all factors and reasons, one soon realizes that friends are more likely to influence on children rather than teachers. However, they have their own effect as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 780, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ors will be as similar as their friend. Whereas they spend just a few hours with their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, first, however, if, look, really, so, well, whereas, for example, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2263.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99558498896 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75225569883 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518763796909 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0216255745 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3913043478 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6956521739 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34782608696 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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