TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Teachers have always been an important part of society, and in many cultures they are highly respected. People look at them with admiration because they are responsible for teaching and influencing generations of youngster. I agree that teachers influence students more than their friends do, because teachers provide a lot of valuable information and because they are worth of students' respect. I will explain my statement in the following essay.

First and foremost, teachers assimilate a lot of precious knowledge along their career, because they prepare themselves continuously. Their preparation does not end the moment they graduate university, but they continue their learning process throughout their lives by reading new studies, going to courses, participating in researches and projects. Therefore, they are very well-prepared and students are aware of this. As a consequence, they value their teachers, considering them role models and take advantages of what they can offer every time they can. Whereas, friends can not give any plus to a student's self growth. For instance, back in my college I had a favorite professor. I like his courses because the classes were based on interaction, communication and a lot of practical activities. He was always introducing us new concepts and interesting facts, making us to never want skip his class. One day, one of my friends proposed me to go to a hiking trip, assuring me that it will be and exciting experience. Even though it seems and an adventurous idea, I preferred to attend my favorite professor's class. I could have missed anything from the quintessential facts he would presented.

Second, due to their experience, career and status, students tend to respect their professors. Everybody has to admit that being a professor is not an easy job, mainly because their responsibility is enormous. Professors have to teach thousands of students, and they must take into account that those students represent the future of the community. It is quite stressful to do this, when thinking that a poor education may lead them to a insecure future. For instance, as a child I was told that I should listen to my professors because they are a essential part of the community. Moreover, they were presented as people who have a plethora of information, and that it was my duty to listen to them and to try to get as much as possible from them. As a consequence, my respect for them has constantly increased, making me to believe that their teachings and advice are more valuable than of others' people.

To summarize, students are definitely more affected by their professors then by their friends. This is due to the fact that teachers are one of the most significant branch of world, and because they are preparing whole generations of students for being successful. Parents also contributes to this by instilling their off-springs that teachers are worth of being respected.

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Average: 9.7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 560, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hat they can offer every time they can. Whereas, friends can not give any plus to a stu...
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Line 3, column 602, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...ereas, friends can not give any plus to a students self growth. For instance, back in my c...
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Line 3, column 1189, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'present'
Suggestion: present
... from the quintessential facts he would presented. Second, due to their experience, ca...
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Line 5, column 437, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... that a poor education may lead them to a insecure future. For instance, as a chi...
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Line 5, column 547, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...isten to my professors because they are a essential part of the community. Moreov...
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Line 7, column 375, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... teachers are worth of being respected.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, still, then, therefore, well, whereas, as to, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2465.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13541666667 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97573447399 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527083333333 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1983455139 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188370131749 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582465555879 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698325401033 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147105832916 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548287596537 0.0645574589148 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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