It is generally accepted that the behavior of people, especially students is highly influenced by other people, which is known as social influence. An interesting question is whether students are less influenced by their friends than by their teachers. In my opinion, although it is a difficult work to provide a concrete answer to the question, it would be more straightforward to discuss factors are involved in it.
First, the friendship between students is known as a source of social influence which leads to changes in students' behavior and even their social habits. Students spend most of their time in school and therefore they are heavily in company with their friends, who are those have a broad range of similarities with them. They play together, do assignments, participate in voluntary works, and so on. As a result, they have enough time to influence each other in different aspects of their life. For instance, a student who spends his/her leisure time on a sport like swimming can encourage his/her friend to the sport.
Second, teachers, admittedly, have an indisputable effect on students' behavior because they are responsible for students' behavior at school. Also, students are in exposure to teacher's beliefs and opinion in some classes like philosophy, anthropology, and so forth. Thus, students will learn a wide range of their knowledge and beliefs, which obviously affects their behavior, in teachers’ company. Furthermore, some teachers make an intimate atmosphere in classes through a sense of humor thanks to their teaching style. As a result, students feel more comfortable in classes and this type of intimacy leads to profound influences on students’ behavior.
In conclusion, given the provided arguments, it is my deep conviction that crucial factors in social influence are kindness and intimacy in relationships, and these key factors could be helpful in determining whether students are more influenced by teachers or friends.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ittedly, have an indisputable effect on students behavior because they are responsible f...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3729903537 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00011889633 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549839228296 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2887787694 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.357142857 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2142857143 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249348083192 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921763478286 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560464684977 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153560820676 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237380131192 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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