The development of human at younger age is more dependent on what they learn in the school. The effect of school on children may be resulted from their teachers or their classmates. Some believe that students prefer to imitate their friends in the school; others argue that notion because of the influence of teachers on them. I am of the conviction that children have greater impact on each other for two following reasons.
To begin with, people at any age are affected by whom they spend greater amount of time. To be more specific, students at school age are mostly talking to or playing with their peers. Hence, it makes sense that they imitate their classmates or close friends. My own experience is a good example of this. When I was in the high school, I had two friends named Hosna and Pouneh. Hosna and I were planning to study medicine in the future; however, Pouneh was interested in engineering. We got separated after the second school year. During third grade, Pouneh was so successful in Mathematics and Physics, which are essential to enter an engineering program in the college. While her teachers encouraged her to apply for a well-known engineering university in our country, she took our advice to leave her engineering plans and started studying for medicine with us. She is now a good physician and states that the only reason that took her in this pass is the impact of our friendship on her.
Second, human are psychologically inclined to those who encourage them and make them feel faithful. For the teenagers in school age, the same aged children are more interested to praise each other, whether wrong or right. On the other hand, teachers are criticizing their inaccurate behavior, studying, handwriting and etc. This makes them to do what their peers want them to do instead of their teachers. For example, I remember watching a television series named Gossip girl, which was mainly about the teenagers in New York City. The major characters of the series, where always doing what their queen –one of their beautiful classmates- requested and were encouraging for breaking the school rules.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that teenagers at school age are mostly imposed to their peers' behavior rather than their teachers'. That's because they spend majority of time with their friends and their behavior are more adopted by their friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, may, second, so, third, well, while, for example, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.945 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58831508901 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5375 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3002469965 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9090909091 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1818181818 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215338441509 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666193463712 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670029261616 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154243762014 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481388771604 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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