Teachers and friends play a significant role in various aspects of our life. There is no shortage of debate about whether teachers have more impact on students or friends. In my opinion, youngster effects more by their friends. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Firstly, peers play a crucial role during your school and collage days and they bring many new interest in your life. Youngsters spend the almost entire day with their friends during school and other sport activities. Sometimes they participated together in the same event. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in the high school, one of my friend Simran was a very good musician. I was not aware of music at that time, I learned a lot from her. She presented a piano on my birthady and it was my first introduction with any musical instrument. Moreover, we had joined music classes together and I started learning how to play the piano. Later on, in the university, I did my majors in the music. Now, I played a piano player with one of the famous singer Bains of my country. As a result, I am very successful in my professional life. All credit goes to my friend who shows me this professional line.
Secondly, in university, you meet various people. Some make a positive influence on your mind. Friends also help in your career growth. My brother’s experience is an example of what I mean. My brother did the degree in computer science. He is very proud of that but more than that he gives value to his friends who make during this course. Recently, he has started online computer sale lucrative business. In his business, his friends from university become his co-partner and they establish this business very well. If my brother is not supported by his friends, he would never able to open this high level business. Therefore, friends renders you help in your future career growth.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that friends have great influence on students in a couple of ways. They not only motivate the peers to participate in some extra-curricular activities, but also become the good business partners in the future.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77718832891 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71040551972 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554376657825 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.0718101314 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.3214285714 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.4642857143 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89285714286 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12785987108 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0363910780031 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414592642284 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0858565148895 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507774252354 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.85 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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