TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Most if not all students today spend more time with their teachers and friends than with their parents. By interacting in the classroom, doing experiments and having fascinating activities together, they share every moment at school. In this process, students are inadvertently affected by their tutors and friends. From where I stand, in the growths of students, their teachers play a more influential role than their friends. I will elaborate my point of view in the following essay.

The first reason that comes to mind is that teachers can influence students by conveying knowledge. Nowadays, children who attend school are obliged to do a variety of things under the supervision of their tutors, such as writing essays, giving presentations, and taking examinations. From their teachers who provide complete instructions before a task and check their works after submission, students can grasp the essential knowledge as well as learn how to solve a problem. Without the assistance of their teachers, students, however, are more likely to waste their time in the classroom and eventually remember nothing about what they have learned. It is clear that teachers definitely exert an influence on their students. By contrast, it is impossible for students to gain knowledge from their peers who have similar knowledge.

Another reason is that teachers can provide more valuable opinions with their students because they have more experience. For example, once in his class, my teacher Mr. Jack warned us about the potential risks by telling us that the over-rapid development of the society has induced the gap between rich and poor in our city, which led to some crimes. He also said that thieves and murderers targeted on kids with the same age as us who hung out alone. From his lesson, I knew that I should raise my consciousness of safety and avoid to suffer dangerous situations. On the contrary, my friends hardly give such useful suggestions to me because they are innocent and naïve as well.

Furthermore, it is unsurprising that teachers who are expert in some new issues can make more effect on us. As known to all, confronting the fierce competition in the contemporary world, students have devoted themselves to study. Their schedule is so tight that they cannot afford to keep up with the trends. Therefore, they are less likely to know something new from their friends. Fortunately, teachers can offer their students with the latest issues like environmental preservation. For instance, students can be affected by teachers who encourage them to use environmentally friendly energy and take public transportation. Besides, with the aid of their teachers, students can learn how to contact with an expert specialized in the TOEFL test via an advanced video chat application. Undoubtedly, teachers are more influential in terms of new issues.

From the reason aforementioned, students are more likely affected by their teachers because they are more knowledgeable, able to provide invaluable suggestions, and familiar with the latest topics.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 529, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid suffering'.
Suggestion: avoid suffering
...ld raise my consciousness of safety and avoid to suffer dangerous situations. On the contrary, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, such as, as well as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2582.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2693877551 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91284192213 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538775510204 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0251564449 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.28 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334712911239 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105153291487 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729508134381 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212706009447 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674004339087 0.0645574589148 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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