tpo 21-independent task
The ability to relate well to other people is important because humans are social-based creature.Some people think having good communication skills is much more important than studying hard, while others disagree. In my opinion while studying hard is a real important key for being succesful in your future occupation, having a good skills of cumunicating with others is more important than only studying hard for two major reasons that are discribed here under.
First, what specification one's want to take responsebilty for, needs to work as a group.We can not find a job that doen't form in aggregation of people, and if one person lacks in this skill he/she won't be capable of doing her/his work as best as he/she could. For example, back to two years ago I was a member of student sientific social of computer engineering department, and we were five main memeber,our duty was to help the deprtment to develop the students skills in both parctical and theroyical Field. So we were in charge of performing classes,seminars and so on.we had a member who lacked in this skill and she was amazingly inginous but she couldn't keep up with us therefor; we couldn't trust her when we gave her a task to do, specially when it needed to communicate with professors and other students, and we basically gave her the task that weren't at all related to her knowledge, so as you can see being unable to relate with other people makes you to be less than you are.
Secound,by having a good relating skill, you can learn from your colleages and share your knowledge with them,and make yourself and your company improve. As an instance, there is website called "stack overflow", it was built for people of computer related gruadutes and undergrautes degrees to askes their problems on a specefic content. and other people will help the perosn who asks the question to find the best way to slove his/her problems.and there will be the sitution that is visa versa, which this time the one that has asked a question before will share a method slove another problem being asked by one another. So that perosn will improve her/his knowldege and make other people to improve to.
all in all,having the ability to relate with other indiviuals gives you a better preciption of you and your job to yourself, and what one's have studied befor.so as far as I am concered i will suggest those individuals who lack this ability to work on it and improve to see a jump to the next level for their self and their company.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Some
...ecause humans are social-based creature.Some people think having good communication ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'skill'?
Suggestion: skill
...n your future occupation, having a good skills of cumunicating with others is more imp...
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Suggestion: We
...onsebilty for, needs to work as a group.We can not find a job that doent form in a...
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Suggestion: , our
...epartment, and we were five main memeber,our duty was to help the deprtment to devel...
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Suggestion: , seminars
... we were in charge of performing classes,seminars and so on.we had a member who lacked in...
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Suggestion: couldn't
... and she was amazingly inginous but she couldnt keep up with us therefor; we couldnt tr...
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Suggestion: couldn't
...he couldnt keep up with us therefor; we couldnt trust her when we gave her a task to do...
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Suggestion: weren't
...and we basically gave her the task that werent at all related to her knowledge, so as ...
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Suggestion: , by
...es you to be less than you are. Secound,by having a good relating skill, you can l...
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Suggestion: , and
...eages and share your knowledge with them,and make yourself and your company improve....
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Suggestion: And
...s their problems on a specefic content. and other people will help the perosn who a...
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Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: ASK_THE_QUESTION[1]
Message: Use simply 'asks' instead.
Suggestion: asks
...d other people will help the perosn who asks the question to find the best way to slove his/her p...
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Suggestion: All
...e and make other people to improve to. all in all,having the ability to relate wit...
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Suggestion: , having
... other people to improve to. all in all,having the ability to relate with other indivi...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...tudied befor.so as far as I am concered i will suggest those individuals who lack...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, well, while, as to, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2070.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75862068966 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69126977768 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526436781609 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 20.1344086022 214% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.782389335 48.9658058833 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 207.0 100.406767564 206% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 43.5 20.6045352989 211% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.017379029156 0.236089414692 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00477882846378 0.076458572812 6% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0143364853913 0.0737576698707 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00836696148138 0.150856017488 6% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0144920023907 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.7 11.7677419355 193% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.29 58.1214874552 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 10.1575268817 186% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.22 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 10.0537634409 191% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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