TPO 21: independent writing task
It is crystal clear that in modern society one of the main objectives of every individual is being successful in his/her own career. There are myriad factors that lead to prospering in the future job. In this regard, some people hold the view that social skills like the ability to relate well to people are more important than studying hard in school. From my standpoint, this statement is undoubtedly true. There are several reasons that support my idea, among them I will substantiate three conspicuous ones in the following paragraphs.
The most prominent issue that should be considered is that your knowledge on its own could not be precious unless putting it into practice and it is only achievable by continuing the learning process through a pertinent job. In this respect, having the ability to effectively connect with other people especially elite groups in your profession plays a pivotal role. Interaction with experienced and knowledgeable people could definitely help you to understand new things, recognize your weaknesses and improve them, and boost your knowledge and abilities. But when you just relay on yourself or do not make a new connection with others, progression in your job would not speed up and it would be less likely to be successful.
The second point coming to mind is that when you have the ability to establish a good relationship with other people and present yourself and your abilities properly others can trust in you and your abilities and consider you a reliable person who can accomplish his/ her responsibilities. As a personal experience, 4 years ago, I was painfully shy and had serious social phobia. Although I had the required knowledge and strive for my project I was not successful as I could not present my self to others and it became a barrier for me that kept me away from materializing my ideas. On the other hand, my colleagues who had the ability to self-branding and making connections with others made progress in a short time and were more successful. Therefore, it is of great importance to have the ability to relate well to people.
For short, I believe it is reasonable to draw the conclusion that having good relations with people plays a pivotal role in your success in your future career as it helps you to enhance your knowledge, improve your weaknesses, capture others' trust and make progress.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, second, so, therefore, well, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94235588972 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83702409652 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541353383459 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.0729619312 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.466666667 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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