TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

People usually want to have an successful career in future. So in this process, should we work hard at school or make an effort to co-operate well with people? Personally, even though I don't say relating to people will have an insignificant effect, but I prefer study hard to get a success job.

First of all, mostly, studying hard could increase a chance of getting lucrative jobs. There are only few students who are seriously committed to their study and score a excellent score in a exam. Most company basically enlist those student with excellent grade because they will perform good during the admission examination and also, their's degree score play pivotal importance during enrollment. In Nepal, for instance, there is Nepal Rastra Bank, central bank of Nepal, where myriad applicant apply for the job. According to Newspaper, Recently, candidates, who got admitted in the bank, have good grade score and their examination score were high. However, while relating to people, an ineligible candidate can get the position, and it will hinder's country development because rather than being committed hard work, they will be focusing on how to make their boss happy.

Furthermore, increase in experience may be another justification. While studying hard, we get not only involved in studying , but also in relating to people. During study, we, often, tackle many unsolvable task, so we discuss to the professor, friends, and parents, which create an opportunity to have social interaction. Thus, due to hardworking and amicable behavior, most people will admire hardworking student, an additional point that increases a chance to get quality job. unlikely, if a person is totally based on relating inability, then people may not like them since they are basically involved in idyll act- rather than doing hard work, involved in ostentatious praise of their's superior.

Similarly, laborious act may be a significant reason. When we start working hard from our school age, we may become accustomed to it. We may be laborious in older age as we were in the younger age. Relentless hardship may contribute to get an success job. On other hand, relating to people may act as common factor during job appointment. When both torpid and laborious student's go through relating people process, then the salubrious student can be appointed.

Finally, due to aforementioned reason, the chance of getting a success job through the hardship at young age is high; thus, I prefer to do study hard at young age rather than focusing to relate people.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
People usually want to have an successful career in future. So in this...
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Line 1, column 50, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ually want to have an successful career in future. So in this process, should we work har...
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Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... with people? Personally, even though I dont say relating to people will have an ins...
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Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...usly committed to their study and score a excellent score in a exam. Most company...
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Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ir study and score a excellent score in a exam. Most company basically enlist tho...
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Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this student' or 'those students'?
Suggestion: this student; those students
...n a exam. Most company basically enlist those student with excellent grade because they will ...
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Line 3, column 747, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'hinder'
Suggestion: hinder
...idate can get the position, and it will hinders country development because rather than...
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Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rd, we get not only involved in studying , but also in relating to people. During ...
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Line 5, column 480, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Unlikely
... increases a chance to get quality job. unlikely, if a person is totally based on relati...
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Line 7, column 241, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...lentless hardship may contribute to get an success job. On other hand, relating to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, similarly, so, then, thus, well, while, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16144578313 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73357368859 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546987951807 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0170461044 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7619047619 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209388420387 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676360047504 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479142345087 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13522890629 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505986815519 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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