TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

It is often said that, many people have different views from the word success. The best meaning of success which nowadays individuals feels is to do well in the life. However, success walks around not far away, just depends on people how they wants to gain success in their jobs, either through knowledge or through abilities to communicate well with people. About the statements which says, success in coming days job depends on having well interaction with people, rather than studying hard in school, disagreeableness crossing my mind. For several reasons. First, study hard in school, the rest will be easy. Secondly, in spite of , having a great end knowledge will also improved.
stated roughly, school subjects will make a person more experts in each and every aspect. wheres, interaction with people may be able to make an image regarding his personality and behavior in the people mind. however, study hard in school could help us to be more conscious about knowledge. For instances, if an employee wants to apply for the job in a company, its is obvious, owner of the company will ask first of all, about his knowledge. On contrary, he will not ask about his behavior, how he is doing either bad or well with people. indeed, employee will faced questions regarding interaction at the end of interview. Evidences suggests, nowadays, people prefer to increase their knowledge until they became success in life jobs. Even though, knowledge really make the life steadily for living. more knowledge the greater relaxation will appeared to people life.
In addition, improvement in knowledge will maintain people life stable. However, being as literate, it is important for individuals to consume more time about study in university or school. Because enough education would led them to be more successful in their life, also they will be able to chose the ways of success without hesitation. Furthermore, if I talk about the owner of a company which i was working for 2 years there, he was not suffered good interactions with employers. On the other hand, employers had respected him a lot, because he was experts in the management of company. Thus, by looking at his sufficient knowledge everyone respected him.
To take all in consideration, it feels good whenever someone do thrive in their school study because to be success in ahead jobs. Moreover, welfare would raise in their life to live relax. As well as, education level would also increased for arranging success jobs in the future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'want'
Suggestion: want
...r away, just depends on people how they wants to gain success in their jobs, either t...
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Line 1, column 380, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e well with people. About the statements which says, success in coming days job d...
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Line 1, column 635, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rest will be easy. Secondly, in spite of , having a great end knowledge will also ...
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Line 1, column 677, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'improve'
Suggestion: improve
... having a great end knowledge will also improved. stated roughly, school subjects will ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Stated
...reat end knowledge will also improved. stated roughly, school subjects will make a pe...
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Line 2, column 90, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Wheres
... more experts in each and every aspect. wheres, interaction with people may be able to...
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Line 2, column 90, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: where's
... more experts in each and every aspect. wheres, interaction with people may be able to...
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Line 2, column 210, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...nality and behavior in the people mind. however, study hard in school could help us to ...
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Line 2, column 527, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vior, how he is doing either bad or well with people. indeed, employee will face...
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Line 2, column 542, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Indeed
... doing either bad or well with people. indeed, employee will faced questions regardi...
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Line 2, column 549, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...either bad or well with people. indeed, employee will faced questions regarding ...
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Line 2, column 565, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'face'
Suggestion: face
...ll with people. indeed, employee will faced questions regarding interaction at the ...
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Line 2, column 805, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: More
...ally make the life steadily for living. more knowledge the greater relaxation will a...
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Line 2, column 848, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'appear'
Suggestion: appear
...e knowledge the greater relaxation will appeared to people life. In addition, improveme...
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Line 3, column 221, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
... school. Because enough education would led them to be more successful in their lif...
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Line 3, column 397, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...talk about the owner of a company which i was working for 2 years there, he was n...
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Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g for 2 years there, he was not suffered good interactions with employers. On the...
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Line 4, column 62, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...eration, it feels good whenever someone do thrive in their school study because to...
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Line 4, column 229, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'increase'
Suggestion: increase
... As well as, education level would also increased for arranging success jobs in the futur...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, in addition, as well as, first of all, in spite of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2087.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01682692308 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65611536773 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526442307692 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1507160584 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.48 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.64 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230583645685 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674587643523 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518093558663 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152392303986 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508267327992 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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