TPO 22, independent, agree or not?
teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.
On of the most critical actors in developing stidents' beliefs are teacher as they are the only adults who interact and interrelate with them in their crucial ages. In this context, there are mutually exclusive ideas regarding whether teachers ought to declare their own political and social views or not. From my point of view, I am inclined to this notion that it is better not to share personal ideas in spite of the fact that the other inclination has more aficionados among adults. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold. In the follwoing, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that educators must keep students' minds open to diverse ideas and let them choose their own thoughts freely. By sharing their own beliefs, prodfessors will give pupils clues to follow which will manipulate their notions. As an illustration, my uncle, Farhad, was one of the most renowned literature teachers in my city, Kerman. All of the high school students adored him, mainly because he was an openminded and intellect person. He always encouraged his students to read more about various issues happening around them which will help them to structure their main beliefs. He never suppressed his ideas to his students; thus, many social and political elites had been introduced because of his useful pieces of adive and guidance. Providing that educators enforced their students to think through the lens of their own thoughts, no one could have become political and social thinker anymore.
The second and equally far-reaching explanation to bear in mind is that this action is somehow deemed as a crime, especially in developing countries. Teachers must be aware of their situations insomuch as some declarations of their political beliefs may cause the lose of their jobs although it is not a big deal in developed countries. To put it into a more vivid picture, let us compare Norway with Egypt. Egypt has undergone a dramatic revolution since 2010, so speaking of political issues is risky in this environment. United Nations researchers conducted a survey of Egyptian teachers and announced that almost 20% of them have lost their jobs and have been imprisoned because of declaring their political views. If this situtaion continues, they predicted that this rate will have increased up to 35% by the end of 2050. On the other hand, as Norway is benefiting from its suitable conditions both politically and economically, talking about notions will not cause any problem for high school professors.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned rationalizations into account, I am prone to this idea that sharing political and social thoughts is not useful and plausible for teachers. It may have negative consequences for both students and teachers although there are some exceptions which can be excluded from the general rule. To recapitulate my opinions, not only students' beliefs will be manipulated if their teachers talk about their notions, but also in some developing countries, such as Egypt, this action is considered as a crime which may lead to the lose of teachers' jobs although it not a big issue in developed countries like Norway.
- TPO OG1 independent some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible Others prefer to live with their families for a longer time 90
- TPO 53 independent agree or not it is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation 73
- quickly changing world makes people happier or not 90
- new kind of broccoli on the east coast 80
- TPO 08 agree or disagree: television advertising directed towards young children (age two to five) should not be allowed. 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: ON_OF_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one'?
Suggestion: One
On of the most critical actors in developi...
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Line 3, column 388, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...literature teachers in my city, Kerman. All of the high school students adored him, mainly...
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Line 5, column 261, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ns of their political beliefs may cause the lose of their jobs although it is not a big ...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...considered as a crime which may lead to the lose of teachers jobs although it not a big ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, thus, as to, in conclusion, speaking of, such as, talking about, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2733.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 535.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10841121495 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7750708873 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52523364486 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 846.9 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.810983706 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.227272727 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3181818182 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.59090909091 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207196299029 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623019350311 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556745477623 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137465053014 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0131423377087 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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