Many people think that letting the teenagers have a part time job at this age is a type of torturing. they say that kids need to have fun and to enjoy their age, one day they will grow up and will work for ever. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that working is very important for teenagers because it helps them bare responcibilities, and helps them learn time management.
First, responsibility comes with practice. It also comes gradually. It starts with giving a toodller the responsibility of feeding him/her self with the spoon till baring a family responsibility as a parent. As parents, we have to work hard to gain money to support our families. This wouldn't happen if we are not trained starting from our teens-hood. Teenagers have a lot of energy and power, which should be used in effective ways. One of these ways is to hold a job either a part time or a full time job. Having a job helps with the fornation of the teenager personality and how he/she can deal with resposibilities. For example, I have a friend who has a teenager son. My friend insisted on letting her son work on a part-time job while he is studying. After few months of his work, we started to notice a huge change in his personality. He turned from that young boy whose asking his mom to bring him the water cup to a person who can help himself, from a little boy asking for money to a person who saves money. He even created a bank account. He became more responsible, when his mom was in trouble, he supported her and stood in her back. Really working in this age taught him a lot of things, and the most important how to resposibile person.
Second, time is a very valuable tool in our lives, we have to make the best use of it. Working will improve teenagers' use of time. In other words, teenagers will learn how to use every free second to their advantegs. Teenagers will be busy with study and work, but in same time they have to study, do some sports practice and meet their friends and have fun. Work will organize their schedule. For more illustration, I'll use this example, My cousin, used to be careless about studying, he usually was getting grades fluctuatting between C and D. In his last year of middle school, his dad got him a job. At the begining he refused to work, after several trials he started. Two moths later, a big improvement in his grade
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...think that letting the teenagers have a part time job at this age is a type of torturing....
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Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...job at this age is a type of torturing. they say that kids need to have fun and to e...
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Line 1, column 405, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to time'
Suggestion: to time
... responcibilities, and helps them learn time management. First, responsibility come...
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Line 2, column 285, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...ain money to support our families. This wouldnt happen if we are not trained starting f...
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Line 2, column 478, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...of these ways is to hold a job either a part time or a full time job. Having a job helps ...
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Line 2, column 493, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...s to hold a job either a part time or a full time job. Having a job helps with the fornat...
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Line 2, column 1050, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... money. He even created a bank account. He became more responsible, when his mom w...
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Line 3, column 489, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was usually
... used to be careless about studying, he usually was getting grades fluctuatting between C a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, while, for example, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1958.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61571458877 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538636363636 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0014097483 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.9285714286 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7142857143 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171671908083 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495882891687 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529516929227 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130436986549 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028187627834 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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