Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Most people think that a person has to have a good ability to relate to people in order to succeed in his/her future job. They say that good relation with people helps in passing obstacles and it is the pavement of the successful road. Although I understand their opinion, I have a different point of view. I believe studying hard at school is the key to success, that because studying helps with the understanding of the basics of the job, and helps with the interacting with the future problems.
First, to build a strong building, it should have a strong foundation. Studying hard in the field of the future job is the basic foundation for success in this job. For example, I used to work in Egypt as a pharmacist. I used to have two or more technicians working with me. Those technicians are usually either just finished their middle school or what is equivalent to high school, but none of them had a technician degree or even never studied any pharmacy technician related courses. However, by working for several months they gain the experience to work. Although they gained the required experience, none of them can be really dependable to achieve the work efficiently and without revision. This simply because they didn't study anything related to the job. As a result, they do not achieve a continuous success in this job. After a while, they leave the job and look for another one in a different field just obtaining success. But really they didn't get this success except after studying something and work in a related job. Success always starts with hard studying and understanding.
Second, while a student is studying his/her subjects, they face different obstacles either in understanding the material or in solving some related problems. Facing these problems let the student engage his/her mind and all his/her senses to solve them. The most fantastic result of that, that the student now is capable of moving through if he/she faced with similar problems in the actual work life. I can remember from my studying in the pharmacy school. One day we were doing some practical investigation about patients medical history in the hospital. We met a lady with a complicated condition, and our professor asked us to diagnose her and prescribe the accurate medication to treat her illness. It was really hard for a second year students to be faced with such case. But after good thinking and revising of some reference books, we got to prescribe the right drug. Now while I work in the pharmacy, I'm not worried about facing patients with complicated condition. Because from that time, I learned how to search for the right information and how to apply it. Now a lot of patients come to my pharmacy looking for a treatment. I'm successful now in my job. I learned a lot from the hard situation I faced in the college.
As a conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above. I encourage every person sees that relationship with people is the way to success, to change their mind and put studying hard instead. Why not try studying something just a subject or even to know in details about a news from the newspaper. If you did that you will discover for yourself how much hard studying is the real way of success in everything not only in a future job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, really, second, so, while, as to, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2695.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 567.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75308641975 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64316769385 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462081128748 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 821.7 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3976439178 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6666666667 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1818181818 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.69696969697 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293151449439 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801915230312 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671340827571 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199648297558 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607681120476 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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