TPO21 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Job influences our live greatly. It has a great impact on our overall well-being as it has direct impact on our lives. Therefore, I disagrees that for success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. This is due to the fact that studying hard make us well-informed, more qualified, and allow us to gain good reputation.
To begin with, working and studying hard give people better chance to become successful in their jobs in the future because they can be more informed. In fact, the more study students do in schools, the more easier they solve problems because understating and repeating studying the subjects over and over it become as logic to them. So, the can solve any problem a blink of an eye. For example, when a group of students are interested to become mechanical engineers, it is better for them to start studying physics in more depth in school and universities so they absorb the material more and become easier for them to understand the workflow in the future. Moreover, studying hard can make students more independent as worker in the future because they have fewer questions to ask for their supervisors. Thus, they can succeed in their future lives.
Another reason I think this is the optimal means is students can be more qualified by staying hard. Indeed, having good GPA indicates that these students are good candidates because it show that they can commit to their assigned jobs. For instance, most of the big companies have certain GPA people have to have in order to be considered as candidates to work with them. Furthermore, studying hard in school can give people better chance to gain good reputation because they can get good standing letters from their professors. Consequently, they can have better job offers, which allow them to succeed in the future.
For the aforementioned reasons, I genuinely believe that studying hard in schools is more important to be successful in the future. Hopefully, more parents and administrators encourage their students to but more efforts on studying to gain better chances for them to succeed in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: disagree
...irect impact on our lives. Therefore, I disagrees that for success in a future job, the a...
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Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
... more study students do in schools, the more easier they solve problems because understatin...
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Message: Did you mean 'shows'?
Suggestion: shows
...students are good candidates because it show that they can commit to their assigned ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93131868132 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67770625644 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453296703297 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3466163711 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.588235294 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4117647059 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70588235294 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281105396622 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114011555724 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127472769533 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206746421967 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936676166305 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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