We are living in a complex and rapidly developing world. People have to admit that being an adult in this society is not an easy task. Understanding this phenomenon parents try to find various ways to help children to prepare for their future lives. Many people believe that one of the best ways that parents can teach their children to be ready for their future lives is to have a part-time job. Some parents may think that is a great idea. However, others would not agree with the statement above. In my opinion, I totally do not think that having a part -time job is a good preparation for the future of children. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, gaining academic knowledge is overriding task of children. We all acknowledge that education plays a pivotal role in our lives. In other word, people cannot have a good job without knowledge. Therefore, children should be encouraged to study and enhance their comprehensions as much as possible while they are in school. They should take advantage of this period to enrich their ability in order to prepare for their future. In fact, nowadays, there are plenty of jobs that provide people with good salary unless they are able to respond to the requirements of those jobs. My sister's experience is a compelling example of this case. When she was in college, she had to work hard to have money for her school's needs. She did not have much time to study. As a result, she did not understand her major deeply, carefully and widely. Therefore, she had to face many difficulties to apply for a job.
Secondly, children should have some times to enlarge their relationships with other people. It is no doubt that nowadays people seem to be always in a hurry, they have no time to be friends with others. They work during weekdays and even on weekend in order to earn more money or to get more experience. Therefore, this phenomenon reduces social life among people. Actually, sometimes we do not know who our neighborhood is. Therefore, if some time we need help from others, and we live far from our relatives, we do not know whom to ask for. Moreover, if children have more friends, they are able to encourage each other to learn better and they may help each other in the future as well.
In conclusion, parents can find many ways to help their children to prepare for their future lives. For two reasons, which I have just mentioned above, I strongly believe that having a part - time job while children are in school is not an ideal purpose to support children to enter their adult lives in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 633, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...e able to encourage each other to learn better and they may help each other in the fut...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2150.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61373390558 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47524691623 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482832618026 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7888547795 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7857142857 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6428571429 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17857142857 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288398227804 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772233491652 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727081783633 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200530509476 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0857500510467 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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