Teenagers experience the most sensitive and cardinal part of their lives in this extent of years. They are impressionable teenagers who select their future path and goals in those years, so, this is essential for them to be provided by a constructive and effective schedule by their parents. Personally I believe that it is extremely essential for them to take a part-time job to get acquainted with the environment and some effective challenges to make their mind be improved.
I feel this way for the two reasons which I will explore in the following.
First of all, having a part-time job by teenagers makes them more responsible regarding their life issues. The first pace of evolving starts when they look at their watch to arrive at the job on time. My experience is a compelling example of this, about four years ago, when I was at the first year of university my parents encouraged me to have a part-time job related to my field so that I can learn more by the job. At first, it was really arduous for me to study and work simultaneously, but after a period of time, I could study and work better than my classmates and my colleagues due to accepting my responsibilities on both sides.
Secondly, part-time job for teenagers makes them busy and avoid them to full their leisure time with ineffective issues. Leisure time for teenagers sometimes addicts them to games and parties and et cetera. For instance, I remember when my brother was seventeen years old, he was really addicted to video games, and he never looked at the time to study. Hence, my parents found him an appropriate part-time job and stimulated him to go there, after some gifts and praises he accepted to go there, and after a few times he changed completely. He had no time to play the game, and he used his every little free time to study.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is a great idea to encourage teenagers to take a part-time job to prepare them for adult life. This is because part-time job makes them responsible for their life and because helps them to use their leisure time effectively.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 505, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...dy and work simultaneously, but after a period of time, I could study and work better than my ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, look, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63881401617 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74507625653 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504043126685 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8473358764 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.733333333 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7333333333 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.93333333333 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29695812532 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126170298931 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812387998467 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183394124762 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084274453806 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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