TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples
In this temporary world, most parents encourage their children to become the responsible adult in the future in order to make them successful and joyful. Even though there is a controversial question on whether parents should support their children to take a part-time job or not, I believe it is one way to help their children to be prepared to live by their own. Also, the pros of taking a part-time job considerably outweigh its cons.
To begin with, a part-time job is one ideal way to make children familiar with real life. Regardless of the parents are always been there for their children to support and be the source of love, it will not last forever. So, it will be far better to encourage the children and teach them how to live by themselves is the duty of the responsible parent. Moreover, when the children get a salary from a job they had, they will probably learn how to manage money efficiently because they know how hard to earn it. I think my personal experience is a perfect example of it. Last year, I worked as a librarian because of my request of parents. It provides me with an opportunity to get books free from there and also left me a glorious experience to communicate with everyone without making them anxious.
Furthermore, the part-time job will provide children with an opportunity to know what their real passion is. From my point of view, the career choice is one of the most difficult and crucial decisions that people made throughout our lifetime. So, knowing the job you interested in will fit you is a vital thing before entering a college or university. The part-time job allows you to work like a person who you want to be in the future for a short time and get both experiences about the job and about your interest. For example, in my town, most people get a GAP year program in order to determine what they want to be before college. Moreover, many of them change their first mind when they really decide their actual major or career and most of them succeed.
All in all, the part-time job is not only to earn money, but it is also dedicated to determining the interest and become experienced about real life before turning adult. So, it is the work of parents to encourage their children to be the well-informed adult.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[4]
Message: The pronoun 'you' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
... the job you interested in will fit you is a vital thing before entering a college...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, well, for example, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61083743842 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58724820697 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480295566502 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2742808439 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306408260604 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103149809529 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734652421764 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209558174452 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570777210187 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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