TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Because knowledge has become the most important factor that builds the path of success for everyone, people all hope and dream about to study in a university, which is the place that educates people. There are also some arguments on whether universities should increase the professor's salary in order to improve the quality of its academics or not. From my point of view, regardless of how generous the professors are, the salary also has numerous impact on the quality of the university.
To begin with, the salary is one of the crucial keys that appeals to people when they decide what to major in. Also, even though how much passionate the person is in a specific field, they have to do another work to earn enough money to live. I think that is the reason why everyone interested in computer science because it is the highest salary job throughout the world. For example, in my country, because teachers earn below average, only the ones who have no choice rather than teacher choose this major. It is awful and also not that beneficial for both the country and the future generations. As you can see, the quality of a university depends on the professors, and they depend on the salary.
Furthermore, as I mentioned before because the high-qualified professors are rare, universities are competing to hire them. I think if the professors need to make a choice between two different universities, they would probably prefer the one with a high salary because the most working environment of the universities have only a slight difference. Moreover, in fact, the private universities and high schools have enough money to hire a best teachers and professors, most students who graduated from there are likely to succeed because they get more intense knowledge than rest of the people. As an illustration, the popular universities in the world are almost all private such as Stanford, Harvard, MIT and so on.
All in all, the salary is also have a great effect on the quality of the educational institute. In my opinion, the pros of making the professors' salary high considerably outweigh the cons of it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'professors'' or 'professor's'?
Suggestion: professors'; professor's
...hether universities should increase the professors salary in order to improve the quality ...
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Line 5, column 438, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... high schools have enough money to hire a best teachers and professors, most stud...
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Line 7, column 32, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
... on. All in all, the salary is also have a great effect on the quality of the ed...
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Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'professors'' or 'professor's'?
Suggestion: professors'; professor's
.... In my opinion, the pros of making the professors salary high considerably outweigh the c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, so, for example, i think, in fact, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1761.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90529247911 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75612066985 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540389972145 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6223142284 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.4 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9333333333 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166978461474 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587106013245 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463461614486 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0987954200997 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240728553854 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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