TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The reading passage suggests the discoveries from the leg bone of T-REX can provide much information about the actual animal and include three results of the research prediction. On the other hand, the lecturer refused those points and casts doubt each of the author's idea.

First and foremost, the article states that the soft and flexible substance found from inside of the channel that located in the leg bone of T-REX can be the red blood vessels. However, the lecturer made a counterclaim to this idea by saying that this can be the remaining of the bacteria that colonized the channels once. According to him, the bacterias colonize the hollow and often leave organic material in where they live.

Secondly, the reading indicates that from the microscopic examination of the T-REX's inner bone, the researchers found spheres that could be the remains of the red blood cells. Nevertheless, the professor argued that the same spheres also found in the fossils of other animals that found in the same place. He also said that those probably can be the reddish mineral, not the red blood cells.

Lastly, the author of the passage claims that researchers found a collagen contained in the leg bone. In contrast, the professor made a rejection to this idea by explaining that the collagen cannot last long 70 million years, it is improbable. Furthermore, he said the collagen only found from the recent fossils such as humans'.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...hose points and casts doubt each of the authors idea. First and foremost, the articl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, lastly, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, in contrast, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1195.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 240.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97916666667 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52140489388 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 356.4 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3123020729 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.636363636 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7272727273 7.06452816374 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345466627443 0.272083759551 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128466299631 0.0996497079465 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928443326935 0.0662205650399 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197085619779 0.162205337803 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657260805073 0.0443174109184 148% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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