TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun to play games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing the school work.
Nowadays, because of the super busy society, every parent find not enough leisure time to spend with their children. There is one controversial question coming up to parents that it is better to spend that little amount of time to help their children's homework or play with them and spend it as an enjoyable time. From my point of view, parents should make an imitation to the children is beneficial for both the children and the parents rather than teaching them schoolwork.
TO begin with, memory is the only thing that left when time passes. So, I think parents should spend time fun with children to create a great childhood memory of their children. Also, when parents teaching the school work to the children, most of the time they become angry which causes to harm the relationship between them. From my personal experience, I confidently say that the spending time with parents becomes rarer when a child grows up. As a result, some invisible hole appears between their relationship and the only key to make that hole narrow is the fun memory. Moreover, if parents can give an understanding of responsibility to their child, they have no trouble to deal with the schoolwork.
Furthermore, in school, children get enough academic knowledge, so, the main duty of parents turns to teach morality and encourage their children to find themselves. Because parents are busy nowadays, most children have a lack of information that brings the struggle to them in making crucial decisions of life. I think the parents should have a friendly conversation with their child during their free time to sustain them with love, support and most importantly an information about how to make the right choice such as major, work and so on. For example, according to the result of one research, most people choose their major because they like it, not because they have a passion. Nonetheless, success is the product of hard work and effort that are the result of a real passion. Moreover, the number of crime increased dramatically in the last decades because of the lack of people's morality.
All in all, parents are the people who build the child from the sight of personality, not a people who only encourage them academically.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'harming'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: harming
...the time they become angry which causes to harm the relationship between them. From my ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, nonetheless, so, for example, i think, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9124668435 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63803471943 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493368700265 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6712236827 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.75 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5625 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282915614617 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107361372508 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668512115843 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176765415409 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840580009816 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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