Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better that girls and boys should study in a separate schools.
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
In the past, most schools are separated by gender because they think it was the best way to educate people equally. However, nowadays the mixed and coed universities are dominated in this society. Some people concerned that it would be better if the students study in separate schools by their gender while others disagree with it. From my sight, even though the separate schools exist for a long time, the new changes are far better in many ways.
To begin with, in real life people work together despite their gender, so, the coed schools would be the best experience for the people to fit with each other. They would probably gain much experience in communicating with diverse people in coed schools that could not found in separate ones. As a result, students can improve their ability to socialize. Moreover, there are many people with the third gender exists in this world, so, it would be hard for them to decide which school to attend if they are separated by gender. As an illustration, my grandmother attended the girl's college because it was the only choice for her. According to her, she had a difficulty to communicate with her male colleagues when she first worked in a company after graduated.
Furthermore, the coed schools would probably benefit to decrease the gender inequality which is one of the pressing issues of the world. If the students attend separate schools, the requirements of them would be considerably different. For instance, physical education would be different for girls and boys, so, the teachers would behave differently which causes to increase the gap between girls and boys. Besides, in my opinion, the population of humans would also be affected by this and decrease dramatically within a few years. Indeed, the scientist proved that the brain of the boys and girls work in a different way which helps them to encourage each other. So, I think, in coed school, the students benefit from each other a lot.
All in all, even though the people have different genders, they born to fit with each other well. Also, the pros of having a coed school considerably outweigh the cons of it.
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- TOELF TPO 22 - Integrated Writing Task 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'girls'' or 'girl's'?
Suggestion: girls'; girl's
...lustration, my grandmother attended the girls college because it was the only choice ...
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Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: increasing
...s would behave differently which causes to increase the gap between girls and boys. Besides...
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Line 5, column 605, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...at the brain of the boys and girls work in a different way which helps them to encourage each othe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, third, well, while, for instance, i think, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87603305785 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5378943935 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506887052342 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.6478013981 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3333333333 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11111111111 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1005691924 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362217266999 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037496235754 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0663868392461 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337716280725 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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