Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should recieve equl financial support.
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Health, education and social communication are the crucial elements of life. This brings a controversial question on whether universities spend equal amount of money on sports and lectures or not, I believe that even though how important the health is, it is not the responsibility of the university to concentrate on it. Also, the cons of encourage the sport events and social activities just the same as academics considerably outweigh the pros of it.
To begin with, people also take care about their health enough, so, the university should not necessary to spend bunch of their purchase on trivial things that can tackled by the students themselves. Besides, even though the technology they use in the university hospital is very modern and skilled, it is not the daily need of every student. Some of the students may concerned about their university if they really spend much money on social events and sports rather than improving academic events, they may transfer which is not that beneficial for both the student and the university. As an illustration, one of friends who lives in America said that she is not happy about her college because many activities organized by the university are not efficient for the students that much. As a result, she think about to change it if the university keep doing it.
Furthermore, all those activities dedicated to maintain the students healthy and socialized, it will make it hard for them to concentrate on what they actually studying. Every time, students face with two options and they have to choose between participate in events or study by their own in undeveloped atmosphere. Regardless of the social events help the students to make new friends, it also make them lose their real path to success on their majors. Moreover, I think those events are noisy enough, it will be hard for the students who do not participate hard to study. For example, my high school is the best one of the town and has less extra activities than other schools. I think it is directly related to encourage us from academics the most, not from other sight.
All in all, the university is the place to educate people, not to give them a life experiences and lessons about how to be healthy and become a social person. Thus, it is not meaningful if the university keep trying to host events of sports and social activities for the student and causes the university to lost their value.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...he students that much. As a result, she think about to change it if the university ke...
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Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, furthermore, if, may, moreover, really, so, thus, for example, i think, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86473429952 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6922822771 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497584541063 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.7222830716 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.875 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.875 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125705389982 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471051696834 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0302583588405 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.09065442909 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294058685089 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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