TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r
The career choice would be one of the most crucial and hard decisions that we made throughout our lifetime. Even though there is a controversial question on whether people should choose a similar career as their parents or they have to pick a considerably different major, I believe the major should be different from your parents' because of this complex society. Also, I think the pros of choosing another major from our parents' outweigh the cons.
To begin with, because the number of majors increased a lot in the last decades, there are many more options for children in the present than the past. People now can major as a makeup artist, YouTuber, Blogger and even can create an app and if it succeeds they would become a millionaire within a few seconds. Also, many popular ones imitate and give a motivation to young generations to build up their life without an education and a high-quality university. For example, the founder of Facebook is interesting and the most popular one. He used to studies in Harvard, but he left it to start his new business with his friends which bring real-life success to him. Also, there are tons of famous people who have a similar success story as Mark.
Furthermore, the mentality of the public is changing day by day, it changed their interest a lot. In the past, people concentrated more on the education of citizens which causes to increase the number of teachers and educators. However, now, people interested in the health of people that makes the doctors and researchers popular and wealthy enough among citizens. For example, when my mother was a child, most of the high school students want to become a teacher in the future. Nonetheless, now most children dreaming to become an engineer and make a brand new invention in a universe to become a useful person of the world.
All in all, the world is changing which makes it hard to major in similar fields of our parents. Moreover, people have more chance than the past to succeed, why do they repeat what their parents' do even though there is an opportunity to live easily than this.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: increasing
... the education of citizens which causes to increase the number of teachers and educators. H...
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Line 5, column 560, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
... to become an engineer and make a brand new invention in a universe to become a useful person...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, second, so, for example, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75274725275 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56316767363 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549450549451 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6715288571 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.125 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131352996431 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407954562598 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475736411805 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0871831181554 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046331858531 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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