Nowadays, in order to survive the current economic climate, both mothers and fathers are supposed to work from dawn to dusk, and, owing to their hectic daily schedules. They experience many difficulties and problem to be succeed in their job. This is a good opportunity for children to choose the job akin to their parent to use their experiment to overcome their problems and promote their job. Personally, I believe that it is better for children to have job to be closer resemblence to their parents. I feel this way for the following reason.
First of all, having the similar job with parents help the children to overcome the problems that encounter during the job. Parents experience the same problems and do have the fundamental solution for every problem related to that job. My experience is a compelling example of this. About two years ago when I first got a job, it was similar to my father's job. My father is finance officer in an international organization and I had a job by the title of finance assistant in on organization. During that period of time I encountered many problems in the office related to financial issues, fortunately there was my father who solved all of my problem. As a result, I has no problem with financial issues because my father was supporting me in every pace of my work.
Secondly, the similar job with parents cooperates the children to improve their job and promote it wider. Whenever children want to have an own business or write a proposal to make his job wider, there are parents who lead the issue. For instance, my uncle has a snak company while his sun has a candy company. My cousin wanted to promote his company and make it reputed, so, my uncle made him an attractive advertisement and posters to advertise his company. In conlusion, his company became popular.
Finally, I am of the opinion that it is really good for children to have a similar job to their parents. Because it can help them to overcome their problems and because they can promore and evolve their job by their collaberations.
- TPO 31 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree of disagree with following statement?Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- TPO 30 Integrated Writing Task 82
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- TOEFL T P O 32 - Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 458, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT
Message: Use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
... that it is better for children to have job to be closer resemblence to their paren...
Line 2, column 506, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME
Message: Use simply 'period'.
...sistant in on organization. During that period of time I encountered many problems in the offi...
Line 2, column 669, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
...olved all of my problem. As a result, I has no problem with financial issues becaus...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i feel, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72144846797 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7141956081 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476323119777 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8689971062 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2105263158 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372378068389 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138021869571 0.076458572812 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118345888282 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244631301312 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731994440076 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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