TOEFL T P O 32 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading passage and the lecture are both about a strange noise sound in the underground water in the Russian submarines patrolling, however, the source of these noises have not detected yet. The author of the reading explains some hypothesis that may be source of sounds. This lecturer challenges the statements made by the author, with specific reasons.
First of all, the author of the passage implies that male and female of orca whales may be the source of the noises, because there is orca whales habitat. This argument challenges by the speaker. She is of the opinion that orca whales are living on the surface water of the ocean, while the sound is heard from the bottom or deep of the ocean. She continued that the whales sound could be detected by the sonars.
Secondly, the writer of the reading contends that another source of these sounds may be giant squid, which has a soft body, and could not be detected by sonar. The lecturer, however, rebuts this by asserting that the sound was heard in one decade, and was disappeared for two decades, since the giant squid was living there, the sound should not be disappeared. Therefore, she added, the giant squid is not the source of the sound and noise.
Finally, it is mentioned in the reading passage that may one of the countries is secretly patrolling the area, in which its machinery could not detected by technology. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that the sound source is moving around quickly, and technologists could not detect it in one and the same area, and this is impossible that another country patrolling the area, if so, they would use silent machineries

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 145, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'detect'
Suggestion: detect
... area, in which its machinery could not detected by technology. The lecturer, on the oth...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 297, Rule ID: ONE_AND_THE_SAME[1]
Message: Use simply 'the same'.
Suggestion: the same
...nd technologists could not detect it in one and the same area, and this is impossible that anoth...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1363.0 1373.03311258 99% => OK
No of words: 285.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78245614035 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42993539553 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.540411800872 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 416.7 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7857910323 49.2860985944 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.583333333 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 21.698381199 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 7.06452816374 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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