TOEFL T P O 32 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading and the lecture are both about the strange sound which was heard by submarine sailors in Russia between 1960s and 1980s. The reading passage provides three theories hypothesize the creator of the sound. On the other hand, the professor in the lecture states some reasons to refuse each theory one by one.
First of all, the author in text mentions a theory which says that the sound is belonging to orca whales in their courtship ceremony. However, the professor rejects the theory and claims that orca whales are living near the surface water. So, the submarines which are in the deep ocean could not hear the voice. She added that if the sound was related to whales the sonar had to detect the whales but it did not.
Secondly, the author in the text mentions another hypothesis which argues that the sound may be related to the giant squid because they have no bone and have soft body, the sonar could not detect them. The instructor in the lecture challenges the idea by asserting that this theory could be a good reason if the sound continued till now because the giant are living there until now, whereas, the sound disappeared after 1980s. As a result the sound was not belonged to giant squid.
Finally, it is mentioned in the text about the third theory which claims that the sound could be related to another military submarine that patrolling the sphere. On the contrary, the lecturer repudiates the notion by the text and contends that if the sound was related to another military sun marine there should be another sound from some machine or engine. She added that even today with most advanced technology the sounds of other submarine are detectable.

Votes
Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 78, Rule ID: NON_ACTION_CONTINUOUS[3]
Message: The verb belong is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'belongs'
Suggestion: belongs
...ions a theory which says that the sound is belonging to orca whales in their courtship cerem...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 78, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ions a theory which says that the sound is belonging to orca whales in their courtship cerem...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 356, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'whale'.
Suggestion: whale
... added that if the sound was related to whales the sonar had to detect the whales but ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eas, the sound disappeared after 1980s. As a result the sound was not belonged to ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, whereas, as a result, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 292.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75342465753 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22005521309 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493150684932 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 423.0 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1440707837 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.769230769 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4615384615 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6153846154 7.06452816374 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 53.8541721854 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.