Nowadays, in order to survive in the current economy climate, all of the family members supposed to work from down to dusk. The current scenario formed like every one just can respond to his/her needs. There for the children should choose a pro-creator aim for their own live. Many people adhere to the view that children should take a similar job to their parents, while others believes that they should be professional in another field. Ego, when it comes to my stance, by weighing the pros and cons, I firmly hold that taking a different job from the parents will be beneficial for children. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that if they choose different job from their parents, they will have an independent live in their future, and being independent encourages them to try more and achieve their goals by individuals. For example; my uncle is a doctor, and he forced on his son to be a doctor also. This circumstance makes difficult live for my cousin, he never enjoyed his life and always his important decisions was made by his father. Therefore, whenever he faces any tough situation, he can not get a good decision without his father.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that by having a different job from parent, children may experience an amazing things in their future live. This means that they will be the risk acceptance, and if they lose or win, they will dominate on the scenario and solve their problems in the best way. For instance, my father is an engineer and I am a food technologist. I am very successful in my live because I myself chose my major and also find my favorite job. Rarely do I face the problems that I can not resolve them wise versa of my cousin.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, personally I believe having a different job from parent can lead the children to draw their own future. In addition, it would encourage them to experience the best circumstances to their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...survive in the current economy climate, all of the family members supposed to work from do...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 316, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...and he forced on his son to be a doctor also. This circumstance makes difficult live...
^^^^
Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'thing'?
Suggestion: thing
...ent, children may experience an amazing things in their future live. This means that t...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72651933702 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67759938669 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544198895028 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7307206542 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.647058824 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2941176471 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240507909444 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801957357903 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789666363982 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16835721868 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397196983307 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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