TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r

Some people believe that children choose a job that is identical to their parent's. Nevertheless, others think the children do jobs that are different from their parent's job. From my point of view, the children should follow their passion when choosing work. I disagree with the idea for the following reasons.

To begin with, children have more job option to choose than their parents have because of this changing world. People create many new job positions such as Youtuber, Bloggers and so on. Also, now females can become a pilot which is not eligible in the past. Nonetheless, some job positions are disappearing or turn into a new one in order to fit with society. For example, when my mother was a child, there were many bootmakers. However, now, there is only a few bootmakers exist in this society because of the boots and shoes of foreign brands.

Another reason is, choosing a job with their favor will lead the person into success in the future. Only when people have an interest in something, they come with an effort and hard work. Also, I think an interest assist more the person more than most parents do. From my personal experience, I choose to work as a material scientist even though both my parents are teachers. I know how hard to do an unfamiliar job, but it appeals to me more than anything. I cannot concentrate when I try to teach children which causes a problem to be an expert.

All in all, the world is changing which gives more opportunity for children to choose the major they love. Furthermore, the children are a different individual from their parents. So, they need to pick things with their favor.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to work'
Suggestion: to work
...ould follow their passion when choosing work. I disagree with the idea for the follo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, for example, i think, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1356.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 287.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72473867596 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47928444596 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554006968641 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.8909980174 48.9658058833 39% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.3684210526 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1052631579 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386451110561 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125771072493 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110348523508 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260228221553 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12809525626 0.0645574589148 198% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.5 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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