TPO 27- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of debate whether when people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. In my humble opinion, I chose the former option. I feel this way for two main reasons which, I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, in today's modern world getting a secured job is very difficult. Hence, in every opportunity that would come along must be taken seriously and do not let it to pass by. There are a lot of competition in finding a decent job, so when people have the chance to get a stable work then they must go for it and don't waste the opportunity. For instance, there are many other applicants when I graduated in Nursing and the competition is very high that you need to compete with other people. Also, applicants will wait for couple of months before company or institution will notice their resume. I applied to numerous hospitals in my hometown and only few hospital called back. I had the chance to be a part of an institution which is leading in health care industry, I did not waste my chance to be a part of this company and right to this moment I am very happy that I grabbed this wonderful career. I learned so much with this job and helped me become a proficient and professional Nurse that I am today.
Secondly, the negative outcome for waiting for a job that is satisfying is that you might miss a good job opportunity. In other words, time and effort will be wasted applying to different company just to find the perfect job. For instance, my friend Edd is a visual artist by profession and he applied on numerous companies around Makati city. Edd was so picky and choosy to his work that he rejected so many offers given to him. There was this offer that he regret that he declined, it was a job opportunity in Singapore where he will be the lead visual artist. Edd declined it because he feels at that time that the work load will not satisfy his needs as an artist. The company offered him high salary and housing accommodation for free, but this offer that he declined was the best offer he received in his entire career and he deeply regret that he refused to part of the company. All in all, opportunity only knocks once and you must take it immediately.
To summarize, I believe that it is more beneficial to take an job opportunity immediately if there is a chance. This is because it is difficult to find a decent job that pays well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 320, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...table work then they must go for it and dont waste the opportunity. For instance, th...
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Line 3, column 909, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...y that I grabbed this wonderful career. I learned so much with this job and helpe...
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Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...tive outcome for waiting for a job that is satisfying is that you might miss a good job oppor...
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Line 5, column 840, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'regrets'.
Suggestion: regrets
...ived in his entire career and he deeply regret that he refused to part of the company....
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Line 7, column 60, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ieve that it is more beneficial to take an job opportunity immediately if there is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, for instance, i feel, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42358078603 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5046932549 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486899563319 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5897609541 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4761904762 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8095238095 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292283860996 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0909989574907 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112477488218 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223499787424 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121240854444 0.0645574589148 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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