TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex
There is no doubt that the job is of paramount importance in humankind's life. People not only need a secure job but also need a desirable profession. This brings up a highly controversial topic regarding jobs whether it is better to choose a secure job or wait to find a desirable work. I believe selecting a secure job is better than wait for a satisfying work. The reasons behind this viewpoint connected to the living expenses as well as the bad economic condition which I will explain them in the following paragraphs in great detail.
To begin with, people need money for paying their expenses. In other words, a secure job is a permanent job enabling people to make money so that they can give their compulsory expenses such as accommodation expenses, transportation bills and so forth. However, if individuals exploring job wait to find a satisfying job, they will not be able to pay the aforementioned expenses. My brother's experience provides an illuminating insight into this fact. My brother studied physical science at the university but he could not find a career related to his area of interest. Although he found a secure job, this work did not satisfy him and thus he decided to quit. He had not known that he could not find the job before he made that decision. He currently explores a job because he is in financial pressure and needs money for paying his living expenses. Nevertheless, he would not be in this arduous situation unless he left his secure profession. Hence, it is better to get a secure job rather than wait for a satisfying career, as people need money for their expenses.
The second point worth discussing is related to the economic condition of the world. In fact, nowadays, a lot of companies are going to disappear because of bad economic conditions. This results in an increase in the rate of unemployment in the counties even the industrialized countries such as the US or the France. When a person misses the opportunity of getting a secure job, it is unlikely that he or she will be able to find a career in the future. For instance, as I previously mentioned, my brother spent a lot of time on looking at companies’ announcements but there was not any company requiring an employee. Not only was not there a job vacancy to be recruited but also the company which had a job position did not want to employ a new person. The reason was dealing with financial problems that companies faced. Consequently, if a person has the opportunity to get a secure job, I will suggest him take it due to the economic situation as well as lack of employment activity.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors, I contend that people should take advantage of the opportunity and get a secure job because of being able to pay their expenses and the bad economic condition.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, look, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, such as, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2330.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74541751527 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9278400745 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454175152749 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8449311612 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0833333333 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4583333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270643804105 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858678051088 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659290200291 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179907510085 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0178310388663 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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