Some adults believe that nowadays children’s behavior is worse than children’s behavior was in the past. These adults have suggested three actions that parents can do to help children ages 5-10 behave better ( for example by speaking more respectfully to adults or acting more kindly toward others). Which one action that parents can do might have the most positive effect on their children’s behavior? Why?
– limiting the types of television programs and movies their children can watch.
– spending more time talking with their children.
– supervising or monitoring more closely what their children do when they play with their friends.
Needless to say, today misbehaving of young children is one of the problems that parents encounter. However, parents attempt to utilize several techniques in order to resolve the misbehavior in the children. This brings up a highly controversial topic whether it is an effective way to influence on the children's attitude by limiting the type of television movies their children are able to watch. I believe that this action is beneficial. The reasons behind this standpoint can be the eliminating of adverse effects of television programs and the punishing children, explained in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, some types of television programs have a negative influence on children. In other words, some television programs are produced for adults such as action movies having a lot of aggressive behaviors. However, if the parents control the type of movies that children watched on the television, they can eliminate the aggressive mood of their children. My own experience provides an illuminating insight into this fact. When my young brother was a child, he always watched films in which actors have a lot of negative behavior such as a violence toward other actors. Whenever he watched these inappropriate movies, he became a furious person. He talked badly with people and often got angry. One day, my father decided to regulate the types of television programs he saw. After a while, it turned out that my brother was becoming a polite child. Not only did he become a well-mannered person but he did not repeat his ferocious manners after that time. I had not known the effects of television movies before I observed the positive result of my father's action. Therefore, restricting the kind of programs they watch frequently will have a positive result.
The second point worth discussing is related to the punishment of young children. In fact, parents can solve misbehavior of their children by punishment. Limiting the types of television programs young children watch can be a sort of punishment for children. If the adults consider punishing the children by performing the aforementioned task, it is likely that children would not continue bad manners. One example suffices to illustrate this point. As I previously mentioned, my brother used to behave rudely with people when he watched the television improper programs. One day when he started to display an aggressive attitude toward the strangers, my father made a decision to restrain the types of films he watched as a punishment. My father stated to my brothers that if he continues this action, he will not be allowed my brother to watch television. My father's deed was partially successful in improving his behavior. Hence, imposing a restriction on the type of movie children watch can be a kind of punishment causing improvement in the behavior of children for the short period of time.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors, I contend that children's manner and behavior can be controlled by restriction of the type of programs they can watch due to the removing the negative consequences of films as well as being a tool to punish children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... the behavior of children for the short period of time. In conclusion, according to above-me...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, sort of, such as, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2635.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12645914397 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9459062766 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461089494163 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 824.4 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5104992988 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1071428571 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46428571429 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 3.85842293907 415% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234972473084 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778367178147 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642764174072 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16947458348 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281802945756 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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