Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better?
Nowadays, there are some countries around the world that have strict rules for students to wear specific clothes, named uniform. Some people agree with this policy while others oppose it, but as far as I'm concerned, I agree with the policy of wearing uniform at high school for the reasons that are discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, wearing uniform is beneficial for whole school community. In fact, wearing the same clothes in school, will bring a sense of equality among student and by uniform, all of students either the poor or wealthy ones will look same. As a result of this, students will have fewer conflict at school than the time they wear their own clothes. However, if they are allowed to wear whatever they want, rate of fight between them will increase substantially. The adults who wear better and expensive clothes will scorn the poor ones which in turn, will cause conflict between them. Thus, school administrators will be able to control the students well. Moreover, by wearing uniform teachers could call student without looking at the list of name from files because teachers could see students' names in the uniforms. So, as you can see, this type of clothing provide a way for managing students.
Secondly, student also will get a lot of benefits from wearing uniform. One of the benefits of uniform for them is concerned with their education. When adults wear uniform, they will pay more attention to studying. In fact, young people intend to wear various clothes such as colorful shirt every day in the morning before coming to school, which make them lose concentration on school materials. However, if students wear uniform, they would wear one shirt every day and thus adults won't need to think about whichever clothes in suitable for them. Consequently, they would give heed on education. Additionally, wearing uniform is good for their future, as they will go to military service. Indeed, in my country, all of adults have to finish a two-year military service in which they should wear uniform and if the student wear the uniform during the school, they will be accustomed with one of the military service rule well. So, paying attention on school materials as well as being familiar with military service rules are advantage of uniform for young-aged people.
In conclusion, as I mentioned above, I agree with idea of wearing uniform, because it is a valuable thing not only for school, but also for students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94457831325 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47039547946 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498795180723 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7242299104 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.6 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321199779099 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114556521779 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756485766926 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214533302547 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516785251128 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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