Some people think that government should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with?
There is no doubt that human-being life is affected with technology. The computer nowadays is of paramount importance in people' life around the world. This brings up a controversial question: Is it a good plan for government to invest the huge amount of money on the computer development? Some people are inclining toward the stance that it is unlikely that people gain benefit from doing so, whereas others oppose. In my perspective, I disagree with the viewpoint of spending money on purchasing computer technology. The reasons for my opinion are discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, government can invest money on the things that is more importance than technology which is supplying basic needs of people. Nowadays population in rural areas were increased substantially which poses some problems for them related to transportation systems such as lack of public buses or lower quality of street. Government could solve these issues surrounding rural areas by developing public transportations and improving street conditions. Moreover, there are scores of young subjects who have not been recruited in the companies. However, if government dedicate money for creating business and manufacturing workplace, it will provide job for unemployed individuals. Therefore, it is better idea that government improve and supply basic requirements of humankinds.
The second and important reason that support my standpoint is that our county particularly do not need advancement on computer technology. In fact, currently individuals could live without depending on computer. People can do their day-to-day tasks without computer such as buying foods, going to shopping store for purchasing clothing and so forth. Student at school can study well without access to computer systems such as Internet Network or teachers can teach new knowledge to children by utilizing tradition method and reading books for them. Although many workers and employees in their workplace perform their tasks such as typing and sending emails with using of computer, it is not worthwhile further development of computer technology. Hence, the need for additional investment is not mandatory.
On the other hand, there is a good justification for advancing and buying computer technology, which is bringing comfort for people. Indeed, by advancing technology, individuals are able to purchase several cloth for themselves by just clicking on bottoms on computer. Households could pay monthly bills such as electricity and energy bills by only computer. Women can do their household tasks such as cleaning and doing dishes from the career merely by their mobile phones. All of these things will be as a result of computer development.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors and by weighting the pros and cons of computer technology advancement, I contend that the need for buying computer technologies are not compulsory for my country, because not only government should provide basic requirement of people but also they should spend money on another topics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2596.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01050003434 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550847457627 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 784.8 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0218297657 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.166666667 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284470179458 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764386202317 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062514103155 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168487565338 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076725030269 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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