Some adults believe that nowadays children’s behavior is worse than children’s behavior was in the past. These adults have suggested three actions that parents can do to help children ages 5-10 behave better (for example by speaking more respectfully to adults or acting more kindly toward others). Which one action that parents can do might have the most positive effect on their children’s behavior? Why?
– limiting the types of television programs and movies their children can watch.
– spending more time talking with their children.
– supervising or monitoring more closely what their children do when they play with their friends.
By and large, parents have perennially been striving to nurture their children in the best way. However, today, children's behavior owing to some neglect from parents is becoming worse in comparison with the past. In this regard, there has been no shortage of debates among parents on whether it is more beneficial to restrict the type of programs and movies that their children can watch or monitor their children's behavior more closely when they play with their friends. Meanwhile, there is a tendency toward the notion that spending more time talking with their children will yield a much more effective outcome. From my vantage point, the most helpful action by parents for improving children's behavioral orientation is to spend more time talking with them. In what follows, two elaborate reasons will vindicate my standpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my idea is that children owing to the state of their age try to do some strange actions to get more attention. It is crystal clear that if parents do not give them what they need, their behavior will be more aggressive. Therefore, they will try to earn the attention of individuals who are around them by insulting behavior. It is worth mentioning that by spending more time with children and talking with them about their issues, parents can earn their trust. Consequently, they can better control their children behavior. By way of illustration, when I was in second grade, both my father and my mother worked in a company. They usually left home at 7 Am and came back at 7 pm. They arrived home exhausted, and they only had limited time for eating dinner and then went to sleep. This issue had a profound impact on my behavior. I usually fought with my friends in school; also my teachers always complained to my parents about my behavior. Once, my mother decided to change his work plan and came home sooner. She spent more time with me and helped me to solve my school issues. Not only I had a better feeling about my parents after her decision, but also my insulting behavior eradicated. Had she not decided to change her plan for spending more time with me, I would have continued my inappropriate behavior.
Furthermore, the other mentioned avenues are not practical and plausible. It is undeniable that children ages 5-10 are very curious. If parents don't let them watch some television programs, they absolutely find a way to satisfy their curiosity. Moreover, the ever-increasing expansion of technology provides a lot of improper media for children. Parents by making a limitation for children to watch some television programs might lead them to use these destructive media on the internet. Although parents want to help children to improve their behavior in this manner, the result of such limitations might be even worse. A recent study, conducted at Norway University, reveals that 87 percent of children would not have explored improper websites if their parents had not limited them to watch television programs and movies. It is axiomatic that such children will not behave so that their parents expect.
By perusing the paragraphs above, one can infer the best way for parents to help their children in order to behave better is to spend more time talking with them. For the sake of brevity, a couple of points are worth reiterating: first, parents by applying this way lead children to behave better; Second, make some limitation in the types of television programs leads children to use of destructive content on the internet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... ages 5-10 are very curious. If parents dont let them watch some television programs...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, while, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2942.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 591.0 407.700716846 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97800338409 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93056706295 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64855306329 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46192893401 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 899.1 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0840026624 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0666666667 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308650883742 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101638770807 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706417308951 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227873455241 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346942956595 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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