Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to read or watch the news presented by people whose views are similar to your own than by people whose views are different from yours.
Awareness of news has an indispensable role in people's lives. That is why they have always been trying to satisfy their curiosity by awareness of events happening in their environment. In this regard, some people prefer to watch or read the news presented by people who have a similar perspective with them. On the other hand, some other people believe in watching the news presented by a different perspective. In my opinion, the news presented by people whose views are different from ours is more important. My reasons are elucidated in detail hereunder.
First of all, the most crucial feature of a news agency is impartiality but they usually prevent publication of the news in contrast with their profit. Therefore, if we focus on some news published by people who have a similar viewpoint with us, we might lose the reality. My personal experience illustrates this issue quite well. I had a presentation at university when I was a student. I should have talked about a political issue. Therefore, I had been watching some news related to that issue for a week before I gave my presentation. Eventually, I gave my presentation based on information that I collected from the news presented by a news agency that had a similar viewpoint with mine. Unfortunately, half of the audience left when I was talking. After that, I found out not only was not my information impartial but also it changed reality. If I had collected my information from a news agency with a different viewpoint with mine I would not have embarrassed in front of the audience.
As the second reason, some news from a different viewpoint helps us to change our insight. In other words, we can find out some various dimensions of an issue and improve our attitude toward it. For example, my nephew loves football. He always followed the news related to his favorite club, Persepolis. However, he only focused on some news presented by a website that was managed by some fans. Once, I suggested him to read some content presented by a website with a different view. Therefore he explored the internet and obtained a lot of information. When he became aware of discrimination from the government between Persepolis and other clubs, he decided to be a fan of the Esteghlal club. Had he not found out such discriminations he couldn’t have decided the right decision.
To sum up, the news presented by people who have different views with ours helps us to be aware of reality. Also, it modifies our decisions on different issues. These are my reasons why I believe that it is more important to follow the news presented by people whose views are different from ours.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in contrast, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8281938326 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90135516381 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453744493392 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 712.8 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6827182722 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.2857142857 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2142857143 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.67857142857 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312577498967 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930312715744 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115844494851 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245720807074 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121328961109 0.0645574589148 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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