Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past people ate food that was better for their health than they do today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one cast doubt on the importance of food in people's health. That is why scholars have always been trying to find the best diet for people. In this regard, there is a debate among scholars on whether consuming healthy food among people has decreased or not. In my opinion, people eat foods that are less healthy in comparison with before. That is due to the proliferation of fast food restaurants and a reduction in mothers' cooking roles at home. My reasons are elucidated in detail hereunder.
First of all, the incredible growth in the number of fast food restaurants has changed people's food habits. Also, the fact that most of the fast foods are unhealthy is undeniable. In other words, fast foods are so delicious despite their lack of nutritional value. Therefore, the accessibility of these delicious food leads people to eat them more than before. For example. When I was a child, there was only a fast food restaurant in our city that was far from our home. Whereas, today, there are ten fast food restaurants around our home. I can arrive at a restaurant just five minutes walking. I go to these restaurants three times a week on average. This eating habit made me sick. Not only is my cholesterol higher than its standard but also I usually have a stomach ache.
As the second reason, mothers in the past cooked more, and they obviously cared about their families' health. While, today, women and especially mothers have more presence in society in comparison with before. Therefore, they don't have enough time for cooking. My personal experience illustrates this issue quite well. When I was a child, my mother was unemployed. Cooking at home filled his time during the day. She always tried to cook food with high nutritional value for us. Today, women's idea has changed. For instance, my wife works for a company, and our time working out of the home is almost the same. Hence, she doesn't have enough time for cooking for our son, and he often eats his food in restaurants. As a result, he has diabetes at ten years old. If my wife had not worked out of the home, my son would have been healthy.
To sum up, the accessibility to fast food restaurants due to their proliferation has increased. Also, today, mothers like fathers work out of the home, and they do not have time for cooking healthy food as they did before. These are my reasons for why I believe that in the past, people ate food that was better for their health than they do today.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, for example, for instance, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64383561644 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48833730078 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490867579909 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9227824344 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.6129032258 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1290322581 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41935483871 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258908035494 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704411821798 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885682811145 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198692753133 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115770384285 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.04 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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