TPO 37- One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp-fishing boats. When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets, they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe, and they die. Some people suggest that this problem can be solved through an invention called a turtle excluder device (TED) that is incorporated into the nets. A TED provides a passage through which the turtles can escape. However, TEDs have been criticized for several reasons.
The lecture and the passage discuss whether using TED is an effective way to eradicate the threat of nets for sea turtle species or not. The reading states that using TED has not positive results. Whereas, the professor in the lecture declares that it is an efficient manner for decreasing turtle casualties.
First, the passage expresses that trapping turtles seldom occurs and escaping shrimps through TED drastically decrease their profit. However, the lecture disagrees with that and believes that there are about a thousand ships in coasts and if each ship catches a turtle monthly, They totally catch thousands of turtles every year. Moreover, for turtles' population that is small, these casualties are considerable and make a big problem for them. Therefore, in our investigate, it is essential to consider all boats that yearly catch turtles, not only a bot that monthly catches a turtle.
Second, the reading suggests that there are some more effective ways than TED, like enforcing shrimp boats to keep their nets underwater only a short time. Although the professor argues against that by saying that it is impossible to enforce all boats to do that. Because the likelihood of monitoring all boats that are far from coasts is close to zero. Also, it is easier to enforce those boats to use TED in their nets. It is accessible by checking shrimp boats before they leave the coast.
Finally, the passage mentions that using TED is not functional in some cases that the size of turtles is large. While, the lecturer retorts this notion and points out that the design of TED could change according to its function. Hence, the people designing TED could modify the size of the passage that turtles escape and make it appropriate for large ones.
Although the passage brings three reasons to say that TED is a reliable manner to reduce the turtle casualties, the lecturer makes a reasonable argument to rebut it and demonstrate that TED is an effective way
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...ssible to enforce all boats to do that. Because the likelihood of monitoring all boats ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1373.03311258 119% => OK
No of words: 330.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96363636364 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50365389547 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 145.348785872 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 419.366225166 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4380312948 49.2860985944 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.375 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 7.06452816374 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168340602335 0.272083759551 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059516681111 0.0996497079465 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472945436258 0.0662205650399 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0921951209908 0.162205337803 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356327511569 0.0443174109184 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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