Imagine that you are planning to take a vacation and are trying to decide between two places to visit. Which of these two options do you believe would give you better information about making your choice? Why?
1- Reading about the places online
2-Discussing them with someone you know who has visited both places
For each traveler, it is essential to get some information about places where he/she wants to go on vacation. Most people prefer to get this information by reading online or discussing with someone who visited these places. In my opinion, the information gained from reading online is more useful. It is because of getting information through reading online guarantees that your information is up to date and comprehensive. Moreover, the authenticity of gained information through this way is more than another way. My reasons are explained in detail hereunder.
First of all, if the information that you get isn't up to date, then it may take you away from the right decision. In other words, the information that is related to the long past doesn't give you an appropriate view. As a result, it doesn't lead you towards the best decision. My personal experience is a good example of this. Three years ago I went to Masal on my vacation. Masal is a tourist city in the north of Iran. I have experienced great moments in there. Masal had a fantastic hotel with a special view of the forest. Also, it was so easy to access because it has a straight flight from Tehran where I am living. Last week my friend asked me for some information about Masal and I said to him all that I have known. He and his family decided to go to Masal for vacation based on the information that I gave him. Today I saw him again and he was so angry with me. He told me last year the forest of Masal fired and there is no forest in there anymore. In addition, because there are not enough passengers, the hotel was closed and there isn’t any straight flight to Masal. He thinks I misguide him and his vacation is wasted. All of these happened because my information wasn't up to date.
As the second reason, comprehensive information helps you to make a decision with a better perspective. Put differently, knowing details about your choices might redirect your inclination from one to another. For example, I used to work for a tourism agency. We developed a website about destinations where we gave service to them. People who have some experiences about these tourist destinations write their opinion as a comment under each post. One day a couple came to our agency and after I gave some information about tourist destinations, they asked to reserve two Isfahan's ticket for them. However, I recommended to them to read the website before reserving. After a half hour, they have changed their idea and asked me to reserve two tickets for Shiraz. Because they found out Isfahan's people might don't give the correct address to travelers. Thus, incomplete information might leads us to an inappropriate choice.
Finally, reading different opinions online makes you confident that the gained information is valid. Alternatively stated, when someone states an issue, it might don’t reliable. While, if several people state the same issue you should trust them. For instance, Last year I decided to go to the mountain around our city. My friend warned me that it is so dangerous. He said there are some wild animals around the mountain. I didn't take it seriously and I told myself maybe he is a coward. I prepared all the things that I need. However, I told myself it doesn’t disadvantage to check the internet. I checked it out and I saw several comments that warned about wild animals in the mountain. Consequently, I changed my mind and I stayed at home. Therefore, Reading different ideas online helps us to be ensured about some issues.
To sum up, up to date and comprehensive information that you get through reading online leads you to the right decision. Also, the validity of such information makes you confident in making the right decision. These are my reasons for why I prefer reading online.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 108.0 43.0788530466 251% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.0752688172 322% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3140.0 1977.66487455 159% => OK
No of words: 657.0 407.700716846 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77929984779 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06280665599 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74664102813 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 303.0 212.727598566 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461187214612 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1009.8 618.680645161 163% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 47.0 20.6003584229 228% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.8064335568 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.8085106383 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.9787234043 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53191489362 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 22.0 4.88709677419 450% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257301616826 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508762533427 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534278480935 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153045465976 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391593953487 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.85 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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