TPO 40: surface of the venus is not possible habitant for human

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TPO 40: surface of the venus is not possible habitant for human

The lecture and the passage discuss the possibility of a permanent maintaining of humans on Venus. The article states that it is impossible for a human to stay on Venus for a long time. Whereas, the professor in the lecture declares that it is quite possible if we consider a station on 50 Km above the surface of Venus.
First, the passage mentions that the pressure on the Venus surface is extremely high so that the human cannot tolerate it. However, the lecturer argues against this opinion and says that the pressure on the station near the atmosphere of Venus will virtually be the same as the pressure on the Earth. If we create a float station on the height 50 K.M of the Venus surface, we will not have the pressure issue. Therefore, this issue could not be problematic.
Second, the reading claims that there is no water on the surface of Venus, and supplying water from Earth is impossible. Although, the lecture disagrees with this argument and states that in the atmosphere of Venus there are prerequisite materials for making water. The atmosphere of Venus contains a huge amount of carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid, and it is absolutely possible to make water with these chemical materials. Hence, we don't need to import water from Earth.
Finally, the writer points out that solar power cells will be inefficient on the surface of Venus due to the reflection of the sunlight by both a thick layer of clouds and a dense layer of carbon dioxide. While the professor retorts that notion and believes that the clouds layer above the mentioned height is not thick. If we put the station on that height above the surface, solar power sells can collect the sunlight from the Sun above the station directly and reflected from the thick clouds layer under the station indirectly. Therefore, it cannot be a significant problem for permanent maintaining of human on Venus.
Although the passage brings three reasons to express that there is no possibility for staying on Venus for a long time, the professor makes a reasonable argument against that to demonstrate it is completely possible.

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Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 301, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the same as the pressure on the Earth. If we create a float station on the height...
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Line 2, column 349, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: M
...eate a float station on the height 50 K.M of the Venus surface, we will not have ...
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Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ith these chemical materials. Hence, we dont need to import water from Earth. Final...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 30.3222958057 165% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1373.03311258 127% => OK
No of words: 360.0 270.72406181 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84444444444 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58368575852 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441666666667 0.540411800872 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 545.4 419.366225166 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0434863621 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 7.06452816374 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38006202236 0.272083759551 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13689314424 0.0996497079465 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553699053508 0.0662205650399 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202323947164 0.162205337803 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800780336824 0.0443174109184 181% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 63.6247240618 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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