If you want to recommend a way to reduce living expenses for your friend, which of the following will you choose? Why?
1- Find a roommate to share a room
2- Do not buy the latest mobile phone, Buy new technological devices less frequently
3- Buy cheap foods and cook home (do not often eat outside)
Youngsters have always been trying to decrease living expenses to save money and spend it on vital priorities. Some of them prefer to do that by buying new technological devices less often or cocking at home instead of eating at restaurants. While some others try to find a roommate to decrease their costs. In this regard, if my friend asks me to suggest to him a way to reduce living expenses, I will highly recommend him to find a roommate. That is because he can share common costs with his roommate. Also, that is an opportunity to use some of his roommate's devices. My reasons are elucidated in detail hereunder.
First of all, by sharing some costs with a roommate, a big part of my friend's costs will reduce. He can share the rent of the house, furniture, and bills with his roommate. Put simply, these costs are more in comparison with buying a new phone or eating food outside. Therefore, a roommate could decrease living expenses more than other options. My personal experience illustrates this issue quite well. When I was a student my father gave me an amount of money to rent a house. I tried to find a house that I could afford, but even the price of renting an ordinary house was incredible. Consequently, I asked my friend to rent a house with each other. Moreover, we bought some furniture and divided its cost among ourselves. As a result, my living expenses reduced noticeably and I could save more money monthly. After three months I bought a great mobile phone with the money that I saved. While had I not found a roommate I would not have afforded to rent a house.
As the second reason, my friend can borrow his roommate laptop for doing what he needs. Consequently, it is not crucial for him to buy a laptop and he can save his money. In other words, roommates could exchange some of their devices like laptops, cameras, and mobile phones. They can incredibly reduce living expenses by doing this. For example, my brother lives with his friend in a rental house. He is an architect and usually needs a laptop for doing his works. However, most of his income spend on rent's cost and he can't buy a laptop. Therefore, he usually borrows his roommate' laptop. Also, sometimes, his roommate borrows my brother camera. By doing such exchanges not only do they reduce living expenses but also learn cooperation.
To sum up, finding a roommate reduces some costs related to renting a house, furniture, and bills. In addition, the possibility of exchanging some devices like laptops and cameras causes a decline in costs. These are my reasons for why I believe that finding a roommate is the most effective way of reducing living expenses.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...bile phone with the money that I saved. While had I not found a roommate I would not ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, as a result, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2214.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67088607595 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55844465517 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466244725738 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.2295376414 48.9658058833 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.1875 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8125 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28125 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242003167042 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662095887801 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473242438102 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165245588709 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288264125035 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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