Some people think that success is most important in their life. Others think that it’s more important to be happy when they fail. Which idea do you agree with and why?
By and large, people have perennially been facing challenging issues in their lives. It is axiomatic that no one can overcome all these issues, and some failures in life are inevitable. However, some individuals spare no effort to be successful in their lives. In this regard, there has been no shortage of debates among people on whether success is most important in their life or its excellence pales in comparison with being happy when they fail. From my vantage point, it is more crucial for human beings to be happy when they fail. In what follows, two elaborate reasons will vindicate my standpoint.
The first reason corroborating my idea is that happiness as motivation could play a pivotal role for a person who has to do more effort when he or she fails. It is crystal clear that the combination of motivation and effort could lead individuals to luminous results. Moreover, who can claim that he/she has never failed in life? Absolutely no one. Therefore, having a good mood is crucial when we encounter failure. By way of illustration, three years ago, my friend and I tried to launch a start-up in the field of tourism. We couldn't find a financial sponsor despite our attempts. My friend got discouraged and was so sad because of our failure and abandoned our common project. Whereas I kept my morale up with happiness, and I lonely tried to pave the way to prosperity. Eventually, after a year, I succeeded to find a sponsor who financially helped me, and I launched my start-up. It is worth mentioning that, not only my friend gave up our project but also he couldn't come back to his ordinary mood after a year. Had I not been happy after that failure, I would not have increased my efforts, and I might not have launched the start-up.
Furthermore, people who fail in their lives will experience a lot of stress and nervous pressures if they don't control them by happiness and optimistic. The fact that these stresses and nervous pressures can hurt individuals' health is undeniable. As a case in point, last year, my uncle invested in a work project but unfortunately, he lost a large part of his investment. In spite of our efforts to help him to forget that failure, he was so angry and nervous, and no one could make him relax. The nervous pressure of that failure led him to a heart attack and died. He would have been alive if he had controlled those pressures by happiness and optimistic.
By perusing the paragraphs above, one can infer that being happy when human beings fail is more important than success in life. For the sake of brevity, a couple of points are worth reiterating: first, happiness is a motivation for more efforts; second, being happy prevent nervous pressures owing to failures that might hurt people's health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, whereas, as to, by and large, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2284.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74844074844 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70177818827 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511434511435 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0365870814 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8461538462 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53846153846 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223758558454 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612210905885 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0892628464107 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167353618735 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115642252266 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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