Some people think that success is most important in their life. Others think that it’s more important to be happy when they fail. Which idea do you agree with and why?
Throughout history, success has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, researchers have always searched for ways to enhance satisfying sense among people. Some people may hold the view that becomes a prosperous person and achieve a goal is the main goal in their life. However, some others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that become happy and satisfied is the most important than the first option. I content that becomes happy when people face failure is more important than becoming a success. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mentioned is that people can not achieve a goal without failure<span class="hiddenSpellError" pre="without "></span> in their ways. To elaborate on this matter, when people try to become a success, they face failure many times. In this situation, they must know how to manage and face their failure. Also, they would find their fault and fallacious in their pass and try to solve their failure<span class="hiddenSpellError" pre="their "></span>. In each lose, a person would better analysis it, and find the lesson that belongs to this failure. In the next step, she prevents to repeat her faults so that she would become closer to success. But, if a person who fails in the ways does not become happy and she feels disappointed, she cannot change failure to success. Therefore, she always becomes disappointed, and she never starts to solve her fault. Indeed, she would not become a prosperous person.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that become happy when face failure is key to success. To shed more light on this matter, each people face failure much time in their life since they born. When they tried to start to walk, they would fall many times. But, they started to walk again until they completely learned. We can see this path in all section of life like at school, university and work. Prosperous people always become happy when they face failure, and they don't become a disappointment. Because they learn how to face their failure and fault as the same as when they were a child, and they wanted to learn how to walk.
All in all, considering all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that becomes happy in failure time is more important than becoming a success. I believe that each success needs failure, and successful people become happy when they face failure. In this situation, they try to solve their fault and learn a new lesson from their failure.
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Suggestion: bore
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2202.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1090487239 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30630602001 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450116009281 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8146308832 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.08 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.24 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.96 5.45110844103 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281948037126 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877088366861 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610218119884 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194278034011 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169395341302 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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