TPO 38- Integrated writingThe world's forests are facing increasing pressure which, if unchecked, will threaten the health of many industries, economies, nations, and lives. The development of an international fund to help developing countries implem

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TPO 38- Integrated writing
The world's forests are facing increasing pressure which, if unchecked, will threaten the health of many industries, economies, nations, and lives. The development of an international fund to help developing countries implement useful conservation techniques in forest protection is the best way to protect the world's forests and hopefully reverse negative trends that imperil our forests.

The lecture and the passage discuss whether using the international fund is the best solution to protect forests against the logging industry, oil companies, and property developers or not. The reading passage states that it is the best way of protecting forests. Whereas, the professor in the lecture declares that it could not be an efficient manner.

First, the reading mentions that this fund is a guarantee keeping agricultural area uninterrupted by environmentally damaging industries. However, the lecturer argues against it and believes that agriculture is a destructive force upon the ecosystem. By the increase of the population, farmers try to apply modern techniques, like using fertilizers, to harvest farms more than before. Not only do these techniques increase the runoff and water pollution but also the rate of deforestation due to these techniques is much worse than the logging industry.

Second, the writer claims that the international fund could have a positive effect on the economy of these regions. Although, the lecturer disagrees with this argument by saying that this money doesn't pay to dwellers. This international fund usually goes to farm owners that almost are governments. Therefore, it doesn't arrive in residents. Also, there is no guarantee that governments appropriately use this money to protect forests. Hence, applying this way is an inadequate solution for protecting forests.

Finally, the passage expresses that the international fund is a motivation for the proliferation of biodiversity in forests. While the professor retorts this notion and points out that people in this region might use this fund for planting trees with commercial purposes. If people only plant trees that have a commercial profit for them, biodiversity will not occur. Therefore, it could not be an effective way.

Although the writer brings three reasons to say that the international fund is an efficient manner to protect forests, the lecture makes a reasonable argument against it to demonstrate applying this way is not proper.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... is the best way of protecting forests. Whereas, the professor in the lecture declares ...
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Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...effect on the economy of these regions. Although, the lecturer disagrees with this argum...
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Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...this argument by saying that this money doesnt pay to dwellers. This international fun...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...t almost are governments. Therefore, it doesnt arrive in residents. Also, there is no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1746.0 1373.03311258 127% => OK
No of words: 320.0 270.72406181 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45625 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02737510064 2.5805825403 117% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521875 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 419.366225166 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6162197707 49.2860985944 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06452816374 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102267928736 0.272083759551 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338641898733 0.0996497079465 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0307746739741 0.0662205650399 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0617607857727 0.162205337803 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0163880470411 0.0443174109184 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.3589403974 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 53.8541721854 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 63.6247240618 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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