People in communities can make decisions that protect and improve the natural environment. Which one of the following three actions is most useful for people to do if they want to help the environment in their local community? Explain why?
۱٫ Plant trees and create parks
۲٫ Persuade local shops to stop providing plastic bags to customers
۳٫ Increase access to public transportation (for example, buses or trains) to reduce the number of automobiles on local roads
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
For the last few decades with the increase of the population, people have been trying to preserve their natural environment more than before. Planting trees and creating parks, convincing shops to don’t give plastic bags to customers, and increasing access to public transportation are some of the actions that people usually do for this purpose. In my opinion, planting trees and creating parks is more useful for people to do. That is due to the preventing of floods and the reduction of air pollution. My reasons are elucidated in detail hereunder.
First of all, vegetation could reduce the possibility of flooding. In other words, in an area with vegetation, plants and especially trees have a significant role as a barrier against the formation of a flood. For example, when I was a child, I lived in a city with a high level of precipitation. Unfortunately, there wasn't any good vegetation around our city. Therefore, floods caused by those precipitations usually destroyed our home and had a huge cost for dwellers to repair their homes. Once, our city council decided to plant thousands of trees around the city. After two years vegetation is created by those trees. Not only did that vegetation prevent flooding but also it eradicated the cost of dwellers' homes.
As the second reason, planting trees and creating parks helps to diminish the air pollution in the environment of a local community. Put simply, trees need to Co2 for their photosynthesis, and more trees mean less Co2. My brother's experience illustrates this issue quite well. He is the mayor of the metro police that is so crowded. Three years ago the air pollution index was critical in his city. It was essential for him to found a solution to that problem. Thus, he ordered to create five parks throughout the city. The air pollution index has reduced since the creation of those parks. If he had not ordered to create those parks, air pollution would have threatened peoples healthy in that city.
To sum up, planting trees makes a vegetation cover that prevents flooding. Moreover, it reduces air pollution. These are my reasons why I believe that planting trees and creating parks is a more useful action for people in order to help the environment in their local community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94225721785 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77310965489 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522309711286 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4398069494 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.32 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.24 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.56 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221422040339 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574314231061 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785185508816 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166059225195 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0894341427639 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.78 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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