TPO 36 Integrated Writing
Hail—pieces of ice that form and fall from clouds instead of snow or rain—has always been a problem for farmers in some areas of the United States. Hail pellets can fall with great force and destroy crops in the field. Over the last few decades, a method of reducing hail, called "cloud seeding," has been tried. In cloud seeding, the chemical silver iodide is sprayed on storm clouds from an airplane This makes the clouds produce harmless rain or snow instead of hail. Several pieces of evidence suggest that cloud seeding has been effective in protecting crops from hail.
The lecture and the passage discuss whether cloud seeding is an effective way to reduce crop damage or not. The reading states that cloud seeding is an efficient manner for protecting farms. Whereas, the professor in the lecture declares that it couldn't have a positive effect on reducing crop damage.
First, the passage mentions that some experiments in the laboratory illustrate that when silver iodide adds to cold water vapor, the result is light snow and not hail pallets. However, the lecturer argues against that by saying that unlike in the laboratory, in real life cloud seeding prevents of formation of any precipitation in clouds. It causes a drought in many areas that have a low level of precipitation. Consequently, crop damage due to hills pail will replace by crop damage due to lack of water. Therefore, cloud seeding might have a negative impact.
Second, the reading passage claims that the positive effects of using cloud seeding in Asian countries can extend to the United States. Although, the professor disagrees with this argument and says that there is no guarantee for the repetition of that phenomenon in the United States. Also, he expresses that cloud seeding in Asian countries is tried in some urban areas with a high level of air pollution. Moreover, polluted particles in the air by interaction with those seeds make a favorable condition to control precipitation. Hence, it may not occur in the unpolluted area like the countryside in the United States.
Finally, the reading suggests that monitoring crop damage in some farming regions in the United States reveals the effectiveness of cloud seeding. While, the lecturer argues against that by saying that if the reduction of crop damage was related to cloud seeding, the same results would not have demonstrated in other regions. Therefore, regarding the reduction of crop damage in most of the regions, we can't consider cloud seeding as a key role. It might be the result of a natural variation that nothing to do with cloud seeding.
Although the passage brings three reasons to say that cloud seeding is an effective way to reduce crop damage due to hail-pieces, but the professor makes a reasonable argument against that to demonstrate that it couldn't be an efficient manner.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... efficient manner for protecting farms. Whereas, the professor in the lecture declares ...
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Suggestion: couldn't
...ofessor in the lecture declares that it couldnt have a positive effect on reducing crop...
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Suggestion:
...ositive effect on reducing crop damage. First, the passage mentions that some ex...
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
... crop damage in most of the regions, we cant consider cloud seeding as a key role. I...
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Suggestion: couldn't
...ent against that to demonstrate that it couldnt be an efficient manner.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 30.3222958057 181% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1373.03311258 138% => OK
No of words: 375.0 270.72406181 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06133333333 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70039470366 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 145.348785872 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490666666667 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 419.366225166 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.75216389 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.444444444 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 7.06452816374 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 4.45695364238 269% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154621809908 0.272083759551 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564687422406 0.0996497079465 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0267924161502 0.0662205650399 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0902117677383 0.162205337803 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378696010785 0.0443174109184 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 63.6247240618 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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