TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently
Both the article and lecture discuss remains of the T.rex dinosaur, which contain actual tissues of animals. The author of passage believes that material inside bone seem to be relics real tissues such as blood vessel, red blood cell as well as collagen matrix, however, the lecturer casts doubt on the point describe in the reading passage.
Firstly, the lecturer rejects the point regarding the blood vessels. It is mentioned in the lecture that soft, organic substances are not blood vessels. He continues by adding that bacteria colonize in hole and channels and then they leave soft organic material. Therefore, it is likely that soft and organic substances were left by bacteria. Consequently, it is not true to say that flexible and soft materials are blood vessel of the T.rex dinosaur. By contrast, the writer is of an opinion that substances in the inside of the channels indicates that the channels are blood vessels.
Secondly, the professor refutes the point made in the text. He argues that red color cells are seen in fossils of other animals in nearby places. Some of animals were primitive, which did not have red blood cells. The speaker believes that the red color substance may be a different material for example reddish material. Hence, the idea of red blood cell is not convincing. On the contrary, the author of passage claims that red blood cell found in the parts of the inner bone contains iron, which is exist in red blood cells.
Finally, although the writer points out that scientists observed collagen in dinosaurs’ leg bone, which is component of living tissue, the speaker challenges this claim. He brings up a point that collagen could not last more, while fossils are 70 million year's old. It is argued that collagen may came from the recent source, for instance from human skins when they were handing bones, since human skins have collagen. As a result of this, presence of collagen in the bone tissue do not demonstrate the living bone tissue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Some of', you should use 'the' ('Some of the animals') or simply say ''Some animals''.
Suggestion: Some of the animals; Some animals
...sils of other animals in nearby places. Some of animals were primitive, which did not have red ...
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Line 3, column 502, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
... the inner bone contains iron, which is exist in red blood cells. Finally, although ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1373.03311258 121% => OK
No of words: 336.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93452380952 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43300249358 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508928571429 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 498.6 419.366225166 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.22864275 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1111111111 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2777777778 7.06452816374 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.497441109072 0.272083759551 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145174074524 0.0996497079465 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759550103315 0.0662205650399 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278419136438 0.162205337803 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525529769837 0.0443174109184 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.3589403974 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 63.6247240618 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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