Nowadays it is important to have an occupation in order to survive. Some people believe that it better to work on the job even if it is not the best option. Others disagree because they think the opposite. From my point of view, I contend that it is advantageous to take a chance and work in a secure job. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, I of the conviction that the person would benefit from any occupation because it is an experience and that would help him in the future. Apart from that, a person can also change his place of working at any time and, as a result, waiting for another opportunity would be just a waste of time. My older brother’s experience is a compelling example of that. Five years ago, when he was studying at university, he needed money to help our parents to pay for his education. Then he decided to work as a waiter in the restaurant that was located nearby his university. In the beginning, he was upset that he is receiving only few money and wasting his time for nothing but he was wrong. After several months he gets to know that he is now understanding what qualities he needs to succeed in any career choice and this helped him to understand that any opportunity to work is chance to improve yourself. In contrast, he would not have had become a developed personality by waiting for the other job.
Secondly, we need to take into the consideration that people waiting for something more are wasting their time. To be more specific, they may waste their time instead of taking the given chance. For example, a year ago, when I was in the tenth grade, I decided to work during the summer time. I had the chance to work as a shopper, however, I believed I can have another worthwhile job. In the beginning, I thought I made a good choice but that was not so because I waited the whole holidays instead of real work.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that my position is right due to the aforementioned ground.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 641, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
... he was upset that he is receiving only few money and wasting his time for nothing ...
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Line 2, column 641, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun money seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little money'.
Suggestion: little money
... he was upset that he is receiving only few money and wasting his time for nothing but he...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 747, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... several months he gets to know that he is now understanding what qualities he needs to succeed in a...
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Line 3, column 280, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[2]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...nth grade, I decided to work during the summer time. I had the chance to work as a shopper,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, apart from, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44594594595 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63380978452 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508108108108 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6833421327 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5789473684 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4736842105 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17302251981 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592788305251 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456176635551 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105425659048 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514725367032 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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