TPO-16 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Traveling is important in our lives in order to make it happier and unique. Some people believe that it is better to travel with other people as a group. However, others think the opposite because they prefer to take a trip alone. From my point of view, I contend that it is more advantageous to travel with others. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I would explain in the following essay.
To begin with, I am of the conviction that traveling with a tour guide would help you to waste less money because they already know the ways to entertain and places where you can live with less payment. In contrast, when a person travels alone, he wastes more money. My personal experience is a compelling example of that. Two years ago, when I wanted to travel to China, I decided to find a special group for that. In the beginning, I was nervous because I thought it would only waste my money and it would be better to travel on my own but I was wrong. Starting from the first day we visited museums and sightseeing with a low waste of money. I was really happy when I found out that I wasted not that much money, as compared to the times I was traveling solely. I believe I would not have saved some money by just traveling alone. As you can see, trips are beneficial.
Secondly, we need to take into the consideration that group trips are helpful to make friends. Moreover, you can keep communicating even after the trip. On the other hand, when the person is traveling alone the chance to find a friend is low. To illustrate my position, the aforementioned experience is again proving that. To tell the truth, in the beginning, I did not expect to find someone else with the same interest as mine. When I was in China I was interacting with others in my group and that made my trip the most interesting out of all. To be more specific, I found people that are playing on musical instruments as I do and that made me more involved in the communication. What is interesting is that we are still keeping in touch with each other. That is another reason why I find such trips essential for me.
To sum up, even though some may oppose my position I firmly believe that traveling in the group is worthwhile. This is because these trips allow us to conserve some money and find a friend with the same interests.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, while, i feel, in contrast, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand, to tell the truth

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39393939394 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.509221965 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477855477855 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1248788677 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.4 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.16 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144825309151 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425191692034 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300091070158 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0926176449474 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258625824983 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.89 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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