TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of the role which jobs play in individuals’ lives. Finding and commencing a job is an inevitable and crucial juncture in the life of human being because leading a gratifying life is not feasible without a job. A controversial question which is often raised in this area is whether a person should take the opportunity to get a secure job or wait for a desirable and more satisfying one. Personally speaking, I am of the conviction that people should seize the chance of having a secure job. In what follows, two reasons will be given to shed light on my response.

The first reason of note is that people need jobs to pay their expenses. In this era which we live, people have to pay money for their compulsory needs, such as accommodation expenses, transportation bills, and so forth. Should lose a person the opportunity to have a secure job and wait for a better job, s/he cannot afford the basic needs of a simple life. Moreover, by accepting a stable job, an individual can take advantage of health insurance and other benefits of it. As a case in point, when my brother graduated from a decent university, he wanted to work as a successful engineer; thus he turned down a great offer to be an interpreter in the French Embassy in Tehran. Over the course of six months, when he could not find his dream job, he encountered a myriad of problems to afford his living costs. Had he accepted the job, he would not have had any trouble to pay for his necessities.

Another noteworthy reason which comes to my mind is that in the competitive climate of finding jobs, missing a job opportunity is not a sensible course of action. Nowadays, according to the economic crisis all over the world, a plethora of companies are going to disappear. Consequently, the rate of unemployment is rising, so if a person misses a job opportunity, it is less likely that s/he will be able to find another chance. To put it into a more vivid picture, take the previous example, when my brother could not found his desirable job position, he sought for the offer again. Still, the job position was not vacant anymore. Generally, the more companies go bankrupt, the more people will be unemployed, and the more will be risky to reject a job offer.

To recapitulate, we can conclude that people should accept any job opportunity. This is because they need money to pay for their needs and economic conditions and the rate of unemployment compel them to do not lose their chances to have a stable job.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ose their chances to have a stable job. ...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, moreover, so, still, thus, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62693156733 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79207650721 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503311258278 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0365770265 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.8 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.65 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285312730994 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965760466486 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05994800383 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189489939638 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362445443777 0.0645574589148 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

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Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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