During history, having job and making money has been one of the most focal issues that every generation has faced. In order meet the standard level of living and being comfortable in life, people have to engage with having a job and earning a living. As one of the greatest Iranian poem, Sa’adi, once said a man who rely on others and does not endeavor for earn a living, nobody should accept him in society and he is deprived from being community member. This sentence highlights the value of job. The important question arises regarding to this issue is whether working long hours is convincing and enjoyable or elapsing less time for it. How many hours people should allocate for working? I firmly believe that people working three days a week with long hours is better than allocating more days and less hours for doing job. In what follows, I explore my conspicuous reasons to substantiate my point of view.
The first exquisite reason to be mentioned is that if employees work three days but still long hours, they will have more free time to spend with family members and friends. They are more likely to schedule for a trip with them and go on vacation. However, some people do not enjoy traveling, they can spend their time getting rest and staying at home. What I mean is that they have more chance to get recovered and be free from the work pressure. For instance, my father is the boss of a big company of importing wood. Never does he get rest due to the fact that he is so busy with work matters. Every vacation I wish he could have been with us. His seat is always empty in the memorial pictures.
Another subtle point which deserves some words here is that people having less workdays have this opportunity to pursue their own entertainments and hobbies. Life is too short to spend all your valuable hours on making money and not having enough time to enjoy the money you have made. I think every individual should take time on his interests and try to learn more skills. Not only that, but also in this way, they can make a sense of satisfactory. They make sure that they spend their life for pleasure not just only for working and making money. For example, my grandfather always regrets about his past and always tells to spend more time on hobbies and work less. He thinks that soon or late, people become wealthy enough but young ages do not come back.
To put it briefly, contemplating all reasons, one soon realizes that working three days a week with long hours is not only a good opportunity to have more free time to trip and get rest, but also gives people this chance to improve their skills and follow their dreams. Do not you think it is better than filling all days with working?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
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Suggestion: fewer
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun workdays is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Message: Did you mean 'spending'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'tell' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: spending
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, however, if, regarding, so, still, for example, for instance, i mean, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55397148676 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25395410506 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498981670061 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.400091603 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.44 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.64 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343683003935 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966575947682 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861979490417 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229974636819 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572659224979 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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